“I know it’s a shock but don’t look so down. I’m afraid Yifan will think I have bullied you. You don’t understand how possessive he is. He will throw me out of home if he thinks I am picking on you.”

Would you read a fic with speech like that^ or would it be too hard?

(Not that I plan to change it since it's fun to write this way, but I just wanna know what people think.)