Hi Jieun Lee here ~~

I'm writing a new story based on B.A.P's one shot mv and I was wondering what your opinions were on my edited story line, I changed quite a lot from the original mv so here is the story ! Please comment any ideas you think I could incorporate into the story line before I start writing! 

Please take a read and comment your thoughts xxx thanks !!!!!!!

Drunk girl > guy takes girl to his house > she wakes up 

Guy = yongguk >> 방 용국
Girl = yerin >> 중 여린  

Yongguk takes yerin home

Yerin then starts going on dates with yongguk and they fall in love

Yerin becomes close with yongguk and his mysterious friends 

Yongguk comes clean about being a drug syndicate leader and yerin is shocked 

She then says she needs to go to the bathroom to think things through, but on her way she finds youngjae acting weirdly and holding his phone close to the room in which she and yongguk were in. 

 Youngjae is a head detective and has been after the gang leader > yongguk< for a long time, but yerin and the others do not know

However, yerin spots youngjae's police badge in his pocket and immediately comes up with a deceitful plan.

Yerin returns to speak with yongguk and she says she had a family reputation to uphold and that she needs time to think about how much their relationship means 
 
Yongguk is heart broken, yerin leaves the house. 

Youngjae meets with yerin and he tells her his true identity and his plan to catch yongguk

Yerin is frightened to lose yongguk but it's all part of her plan, so she goes along with youngjaes plan.

other undercover detectives working with youngjae, fake kidnap yerin and youngjae and pretend to hold her for ransom, to which yongguk must pay to get her and youngjae back 

Ransom is $1,000,000 USD and yongguk creates a plan with the other boys to steal the money from an armed monetary car. 

Once they get the money they meet the "kidnappers" at the train station. 
Yongguk is furious yerin is not present. He demands yerin be handed before youngjae.

They laugh and youngjae does too. 

Yongguk's entire group looks confused, then the armed SWAT team arrive and put every one of yongguk's group into handcuffs. 
 
As the rest of the SWAT team arrive at the abandoned underground train station, yerin wearing black clothing and dark makeup stands next to youngjae and the "kidnappers" who are actually undercover police officers. 

Youngjae tells yongguk the truth about his real identity as an undercover agent and he explains he planted recorders and small cameras in and around yongguk's base and home.

Yongguk questions yerin to why she is there also and she replies "I have a reputation to uphold, and a very high family"

She then asks youngjae if she can do the honours and youngjae gives her the gun

The SWAT team leave the underground tunnel to return to the ground above

Yongguk tells yerin he loves her as he gets put on his knees in front of her, yongguk closes his eyes and hears the gunshot. 

Yerin shot youngjae. 
And whispers "I love you too"

The truth was that the SWAT team was not that of youngjae's police force but it was from Yerin's family's private protection program. 

Jieun lee xx