Between Love and Infatuation
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✰ Title: Between Love and Infatuation
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✰ Characters: Park Jimin, Bang Minah, Im Siwan
✰ Genre: drama
✰ Reviewed by: Eyelinerbaby
✰ Review ✰
Title (4/5)
The title, Between Love and Infatuation gained my interest to click into the story without hesitating. The title hints about your characters that will be facing internal conflicts- to realize what they felt are either love or infatuation. The title succeeds in leading your reader towards which story genre they will be reading.
Description & Foreword (13/20)
After reading the description, the first thought that crossed my mind was “will this lead to a love triangle mess”. I do not mind about love triangle since if there is no this thing, there would not be drama. Readers love drama, jealousy and see how loves develop throughout the way among the characters. I have a high anticipation after reading the description.
Since the definition gives out a good vibe, I suggest you to place it before your description. Placing the definition after description made me have a feeling that I don’t know the meaning of those words and you are trying to be a teacher teaching about ‘definition’ of words. It kills my hype to read the story. Just straight away state like ‘infatuation-…’. You do not have to state clearly that those explanations are definition.
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Characterisation (13/20)
I’ll focus on the main characters only.
Bang Minah is insecure and she probably has the most emotional changes among all the characters. If I am her, I will have just divorce with Siwan as I presume that she knows about Siwan and his secretary? With all her insecurities, she finds someone dependable, which is Jimin. She seems weak for now, but I hope she will transform into someone stronger maybe under Jimin’s influence. Your story is just starting and I can’t wait to see the day when Minah has her internal conflicts to choose between the two men.
Park Jimin seems to be the man that meets the right girl at the wrong timing. His character is quite one sided, attracted to Minah and always finds himself beside her when she needs care the most. I find myself p
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