Chapter 1: I don't think the same way as Shina63736.
I think it was brilliant. Perfect.
Of course, would be really good if it could became a multi-chaptered fanfic, but I think it stay better like this: No names, just you and another person, this person being famous... Or not.

This is MY opinion.

thanks for your advice. I will try to make it sound more interesting in the future :)

I don't mean to sound too critical! But the story seems kinda flat, And too poem-like. I feel that if you changed it into a story with characters and stuff instead of plainly stating things that happened it would end up being a lot more interesting.

:( still, it was good.