CHEEZMUFFIN REVIEW SHOP~! (not accepting new requests currently)

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There is always room for improvement. Here, I offer honest reviews/critiques for those who aren't scared of constructive criticism and want to polish their stories to their fullest potential. Don't shirk, don't scoff ~ EAT THE MAGIC CHEEZMUFFIN!

 

STATUS -- NOT CURRENTLY ACCEPTING REQUESTS (I will complete those already submitted, but it will take some time due to midterm exams)

Foreword

I WILL REVIEW/EDIT YOUR STORY (just no yuri, rated material is fine w/me). 

 

If you want me to review your story, PM me or comment on the review fic. Also, tell me if you're alright with the review being published in the review fic (in which case you must subscribe and upvote the fic) or if you want it to remain private (upvote only, and I'll PM you the review). Please specify what you want, whether it be proofreading (this is easiest if you can upload it to google docs where I can view the whole story and highlight/comment on specific details and other errors), a general opinion, an in-depth critique (as if I were a teacher grading it), or whatever else you come up with. 

 

I will not give blatant opinions such as, "I don't like this pairing," or "I don't like this group," and I will try to remain as unbiased as possible. I will comment on flow, word choice, plot depth, character development, mechanics, etc.

 

Basically, this is an honest review where I won't mince words and hand out false praise (but I'm not going to be a bee yawtch about it, either). Even if you think you're a great writer, I'll try to point out flaws and what you can do to improve your story. Even featured fics have inconsistent verb tense; as many a wise man has said, there is always room for improvement.

 

REMEMBER, CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM IS NOT AN INSULT. I AM NOT TRYING TO OFFEND YOU OR IN ANY WAY CRITICIZE YOUR PERSONAL CHOICES, BUT TO HELP YOU IMPROVE AND PRESENT YOUR STORY AT ITS BEST. That's what I hate about fanfiction. For all of its wonderful qualities, everybody is so touchy about constructive criticism. Frankly, people need to MAN UP (like TaeMANNNNNN yeahnoIshouldn'ttrytomakeEYKreferences...) and stop being so scared of what can better their stories. 

Kay, enough of my rant. Anyway, I hope I haven't scared you away with my, ah, zeal (zeal sounds so much nicer than fanaticism, doesn't it?).

Anyway, remember to subscribe, upvote, and credit me, please.

 

UPDATE -- I will now only take one request per person. If you've already requested, that's fine, but from here on out...

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macchiato- #1
Hi there! Dropping by to submit a review request:
Under the Shade of the Reverie - http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/552770/under-the-shade-of-reverie-angst-fxband-krystal-oneshot-kaistal

I'm fine with the review being posted here, and I'd like to have an in-depth critique (be as harsh and honest as you want <3).

Looking forward to read your review! if you happen to be busy, please take your time, I wouldn't mind the wait. Thank you in advance :>
SouthWest #2
Hey there! I really like your view of reviewing. If you have time, could you review my story? I'm okay with it being published in the review fic and I guess I'm looking for an in-depth critique. I would love to see what kind of constructive criticism you have for my story and my writing! Thank you!
Story title: Take it to the Next Level
Link to story: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/580332/take-it-to-the-next-level-blockb-contestentry-nillilimambo
flamzfox #3
Chapter 2: Thanks so much for all of your suggestions on the language and the inconsistencies, they were so helpful! I love you and your review.

I guess in the description I meant more ‘all eternity’ in the sense that he would be forever stuck there, as in the future would witness the same event. But I see how that’s confusing. I love your suggestion on rephrasing the last sentence as ‘Kris was hope’ and italicizing the whole thing. I think it even gives it more of an effect! Thanks ^^

On the foreword, once again, thanks for the phrasing suggestions, looking into them right now. And to answer your question on the foreword it was an excerpt from the actual story. That’s usually how I tend to do my forewords >.<

Haha, I’m glad you enjoyed the plot and character development since that’s where I really invested a lot of time in this story on and I’m really pleased that the effort showed and paid off. Thank you again for the phrasing suggestions, just fixed and your comments were extremely helpful on language. As for the continuity issue, I think the reason Yixing wanted to die in the beginning was because he was always locked in the constant struggle against the force and he thought there would be no possible way for him to ever break free of the pain but after Kris he starts hoping. Haha, it’s pretty confusing I must admit. I suppose I chose to make it more ambiguous and called it ‘life’ because it isn’t a new thing, I guess an earlier foreshadowing of the fact that Yixing was once alive, but then again only I know that and the readers don't so I completely see the problem there.

Thank you again! Credited and will definitely comeback again. You’re amazing.
SecretH3ro #4
Hello!!! I would like an in depth review and it's ok to be harsh if necessary.

Story title: Tantalizing Innocence

Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/544183/tantalizing-innocence-2pm-chansung-dongwoo-khunwoo-khunyoung-nichkhun-wooyoung
Nhoxmew #5
Hey there! I'm requesting a review for my first story, 'Unexpectedly'. Here is the link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/636147/unexpectedly-angst-comedy-hoya-infinite-myungsoo-romance-sunggyu

I want an in-depth review. I'm totally fine with constructive criticism so be as blunt as you can. I don't mind if you publish the review as well.

English is not my first language, but it is for my co-author (redhoodies) so we've been editing the stories and proofreading them many many times. However, if you still spot any grammar mistakes, let us know too XD

Let me know if you're able to take this request. Thanks!
princessamy #6
Chapter 1: hi, thank you for the in-depth review. i like it so much. also, thank you for the recommendations, it will be a big help for me. i really appreciate it.

chapter three: about the journal, you're right. she's using the word 'you' to address herself. and kai does notice about her suffering but not thoroughly until he reads her journal.

chapter eight: i know it's a bit confusing, but i'll elaborate the details later in the next chapter update.

thank you again. i'll credit you... ^^
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