Chapter 1: OMG this story is so good! It a short story but it have a good plot, I LOVE IT!!

Chapter 1: a beautiful one shot....just great , thanks

Hello, here's your goody bag for joining my semicontest!

Plot: It's simple and sweet –a perfect combination for the right amount of fluff. It's not too lovey dovey, but the implications are, and I find it fitting and warming at the same time. It is also rather easy to relate to –which is good, because in this kind of fluff/romance story, the ability to make the readers relate themselves with the story is the most important thing, considering how emotions play big role in this kind of fic. The flow is okay, not the best, but not bad either. My personal issue on your flow lays on the fact that some of the scenes transition are not smooth. I do realize that there are years gaps between some of the scenes, but sometimes they are too abrupt, and sometimes too dragging. The first scene, for example, is undeniably cute –and it serves as a good method to introduce Yonghwa's character, but there is a rather abrupt transition to the second scene. The balance between the scene should also be maintained more: you were extremely elaborate on the first scene (sometimes explaining things that do not exactly move the plot), but some other scenes are not as elaborated. I am clearly not saying that the form/length between each scene should be the same –because what's the fun or beauty of writing in that? But I guess you have to always be cautious on inserting the dialogues/scenes –if they're not really necessary to move the plot or to show the characters, then it may not be exactly required. I don't mind the drunk/hangover scene, because it relates to the confession at the later part of the story. But some other details (for example, Yonghwa's viewpoint on education) are there only for comic relief, and not for the purpose of moving the story. Again, I'm not saying comic relief is not necessary, because I enjoy the part, but maybe you could have focused on other parts of the story.

The story plot is actually very simple, certainly not something that I mind; but you might want to add another extra spark or unique scene to make people remember your story for a long, long time. It's consistent as well, so no issue on that. :) I do feel however, that Seohyun's feeling's development is a bit too fast –I do know that she starts harboring feeling for Yonghwa, but I don't feel like there's a sufficient motive for her to do so. I guess it's more like Yonghwa's persistence that makes his presence to Seohyun indispensable, and I think you should elaborate more on that point.

Characters: I'm able to pick on the traits of the main characters, so the characterizing premise works well. I like how the first scene actually tells quite some things about Yonghwa. And i actually like how you portray Seohyun to be this witty smart girl instead of the docile smart one. The other characters are not dug well enough, but I don't think it's a main issue –considering this is only a one-shot and the focus is not on the other characters.

The development of the character, however, is something that I think you can improve more. Yonghwa's development is a bit more visible, than Seohyun's. I do note that Seohyun's changing feeling and upcoming realization may serve as somewhat of a character development, but again, there should be more motives, more reasons to have her develop that way. Another thing that I think could be improved more is the additional quirk of the characters. Now that you have managed to set noticeable traits of your main characters, the next step, I think would be to add more flair –something distinctive and unique to Seohyun and Yonghwa. Considering you have mastered/cleared the first stage of characterizing the basic premise of the characters, this should come next in the to do list, in my opinion.

Style: There's this...humorous tone that you use in the writing, and I'd say that it is a fitting tone to be used throughout the story. It sure makes the fuzzy effect of the story gets translated to the readers more. I don't have any real issue with your writing style, though I have to point out that my favorite part of your style would be the part where Seohyun contemplate and "regret" things –the narrative part you used to describe how Seohyun starts to see Yonghwa as something more, and her heartbroken state when Yong got boyfriend; this particular stylistic approach lures me the most out of your entire story. In sum, I like the shifting of tone as well –from border-humorous to contemplative in the ending part, the poem that you insert here and there, I think they're sweet and it manages to fit in the atmosphere of the story nicely. There's also a nice balance between dialogue and narration, so no problem on that.

Suggestion:
• No need to indicate "Scene One" or "Scene Two" to divide/separate the scenes. Scene separator or a decent spacing can do the job as effectively.
• Dig the characters deeper and deeper. As stated above, since you've managed to get the first stage of giving actual traits to your characters, you need to further give the "extra-boost" to the characters- make them even more distinctive, more humane. Use the little things to portray their characters, I think you got the basic covered for that.
• Balance the scene and choose which one is really necessary and which one serves as mere filler. Now, adding filler is fine, but be cautious of the length. You don't want to elaborate too much on the filler and leave some explanation gaps on the actual things that is necessary to be explained.

Favorite Parts:
• The dandelion-derived idea. I like how you incorporate Seo's original sayings into the idea of the fic.
• The bickering is actually really cute. Nonetheless, again, be careful not to overuse it.
• '"This is a grocery store! People will see!" "Fine," he snapped, grabbing her thin wrist. "Let's deal with this outside." Do you know how hard I squeal at this scene? Hehe
• The growing love analogy
• The "And that was why..." contemplation by Seohyun at the middle part. I love them the most.
 

Oh. Shizzzz! The first YongSeo fic I read! I love thiss. Your story structure, it has a great foundation really!! Aaaaaaaaaah!

Chapter 1: i really love the flow of your story! so cool! xD

Chapter 1: A great one shot!! I love how you use the the analogy of dandelions on their love, how Seohyun got caught up with her pride and regret. How Yonghwa gets tired of chasing love that didn't appreciate him. How Yonghwa tried to ignore her when she's drunk but could not, and learn the truth behind her facade. How they finally met again and acknowledge the love they have for each other! Beautiful story! Keep up the good work author nim! Hope to see new stories from you!