Chapter 3: nice fic^^
but you left this story with a little hanging end. are you gonna make the sequel?
love this fics~

Chapter 3: Hahaha... It's just like a dream though.

Chapter 3: Cute fic. Somehow, I can actually see this kind of thing happening. Not necessarily to me and not necessarily with a celebrity, but.. Yeah. lol

Although, as I myself am not a writer, I don't know if I should be telling you this but just my opinion k, it did feel a bit.. I don't know.. Rushed?

It is, kind of, a pretty incredible coincidence that he just happened to meet her again on the same day, and there's the fact that he, a celebrity, was wandering alone, to begin with.. But all in all.. I enjoyed it! Thanks for a good read.

And for goodness sake.. Jonghyun sweetie, one does not simply ask a girl is she's a girl. -_-'

Aaaanyyyywayyy.. Thanks again! ^_^

Okay well I think it's about high time I gave you a detailed comment on a story. First off, I really don't see why you don't have more views on this: you write well and the story line isn't outrageously unbelievable that anyone should cringe from it. I rather enjoyed the realistic quality of this fic. Jonghyun is portrayed well as a good-mannered, protective young man and the girl's personality seems natural enough.

The build-up was good; I like that you included context as to the girl's reasons for looking like a boy instead of resorting to make her a tomboyish character. Their interactions seemed a little bit rushed, however, and your narration could benefit from perhaps a little more detail. For example, Jonghyun saves the girl from a daytime drunk, returns to filming, and then they coincidentally meet again at a park. While this seems plausible, I think the story could have been better if there had been a suggestion that some time had passed between the saving and their reunion.

I realize this is being told in the "you" perspective, but I do believe there are ways to portray Jonghyun's feelings along with the "you" character. That being said, I wish I could have seen the development in Jonghyun's feelings as well. There is a lot of attention to actions and gestures, but not much mention of how the character's feel at certain scenes.

I did enjoy the twist you put in the girl being mistaken for a boy, though. I see it used a lot in fics, but rarely is it ever used well and in a non-cliche way. You pulled it off, well, though, and it added to my overall enjoyment of your story ^^ Continue writing fun fics like this! If you need a beta, just let me know and I'd be happy to oblige :)

I hope this doesn't sound incredibly creepy, and I promise I'm not trying to stalk you or anything but what time zone do you live in? We always seem to be online at the same time. Anyhoo, I'm off to read chapter 1 ^^ I don't follow CNBlue all that closely but Jonghyun is the other guitarist isn't he?