Title (5/5)

I think the title was very fitting though the phoenix part you have to figure out. I especially recalled the burnt leaves and figured that was referring to the phoenix! The title definitely caught my attention, so for that you get a full 5 points!

Description/Foreword (9/10)

The foreword was very well written besides a few incomplete sentences and comma misplacement. It was very interesting and definitely caught my attention, for some reason the foreword made me think of a fairy tale for some reason. But it was very well done over all.

Characters (10/10)

The characters seemed very fitting, I mean you really made Lia seem completely clueless to what men were, but at the same time she was aware of their existence and read about them. Which also fits her very well and the plot too since she probably has so much free time and gets bored. You seemed to have the characters figured out and made them fit the story in general and liked that and I'm sure your other readers enjoyed that too. Also Chanyeol's character fit too he seemed to yearn for the touch of a woman after being around men his whole life.

Plot (20/20)

The plot was very well put together like I stated in the last paragraph, you seemed like you had everything planned out. Also it was a very unique plot, though I have seen stories about curses they are usually far and few or not very well written. I liked the idea and got caught up in it as soon as I read the foreword up until chapter 4; I am very excited to see what happens.

Grammar (12/20)

As soon as I read your first language is not English I got a little nervous about your grammar, but believe me I was completely and utterly impressed. Though there were mistakes they were minor, you placed periods on incomplete sentences where a semicolon could've been placed, you sued plural words for things that were meant to be singular, and you used ‘your’ in places where it should've been ‘you're’. But besides that you had amazing vocabulary and you had words that described things perfectly, though some things were misspelled and some sentences worded strangely it was an exceptional job, over all.

Flow (6/10)

I wanted to give you a good score, but because of the sentences that got worded a bit awkwardly or weren't written correctly it made it hard to read with ease. Though I will say you did not jump around from topic to topic randomly, and it did not hurt my brain. I think your flow was good except for what I mentioned above.

Visual Things (14/15)

Your poster was beautiful and all but I found it kind of distracting for some reason, but the font size was perfect and I did not need to strain my eyes to read it. So I gave you a good score!

End (--/10)

You did not yet have an ending so I could not socre you on this! 

Extra Comments:

I think this story is spectacular; I may sound like I'm overreacting. But I really love the plot and idea behind it all. It was eye caching, beautifully written over all and it sparked my curiosity. I really am anticipating the next chapter with great excitement and hope you get a lot of subscribers you deserve it! ^^

Total (76/90) 

Curse of the Phoenix

I really hope this gave you some helpful criticism!

I really am impressed with your story and wish you tons of luck in the future!

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