Chapter 3: So cute! <3 ^^ I still think that it's a bit rushed (which doesn't keep me from reading it at all xD), maybe you could, I don't know, focus a little bit more on writing about some details or his thoughts or something. (Ask somebody who actually has some writing experience >.> I'm not the best person to give you advise...) Other than that I loved it! :D
Chapter 1: The first chapter seems a bit rushed with Jiyong simply believing Taeyang and jumping into a stranger's car and all but the green lamborghini is a BIG plus! ^^ Well, anyway, I like the idea so I'll continue reading! ;)
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