Detached Defenses

Description

Yunho hated the rain. It was sticky on his skin and plastered his hair into thin strands on his face.  There was the smell, that moldy stagnant dampness that clung to the ground long after the rain stopped. 

But most of all, he hated the rainbows that came after the storm, the obnoxious slash of colors across the sky, as if their stupid cheerfulness was supposed to make him feel better. 


Yunho is a troubled foster kid who makes it a habit not to get along with anyone. So when his social worker forces him to start volunteering at a mental institution, Yunho is fairly certain that this is punishment for both him and the patients. What the hell is he supposed to get out of spending time with a bunch of psycho freaks? 

But Yunho isn't expecting to meet someone like Jaejoong, who seems to know more about Yunho than Yunho knows about himself. And those eyes that see too much, know too much, and don't say a word will follow him into his nightmares...

Foreword

Thanks to my friend nalaboja, who is always reading my drafts and making sure I don't embarrass myself with all my typos. Which I had more of than usual, this time around. Thanks so much, unni! Your help and support mean so much! 

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nalaboja
#1
looks like I logged back just in time xD I approve of the title! and I see you've also broken it down into chapters :P okay this is like the 3rd time I typed this, because I keep on clicking on different parts of the story and then losing my comment. um.

this is a really strong entry ^^ I think you stand a really good chance! Ever since the first contest we entered, it seems like we have a thing for darker stories LOL...even with a prompt like "rainbows" and "inspiration" ._. but in this case, that's what makes your story stand out more. good luck and well done ^^ I always love reading your stories. like seriously haha
swabluu
#2
oh dear gods this is amazing /sobs
why are you so amazing and godly /sobs
i love you and your writing so much /sobs
/sobs more
/continues sobbing
this is ugh /sobs
Ataraxy
#3
This is so good. I hope you win the contest! I love your writing do much! I like how you portray the characters and my personal favorite was Changmin<3 the story was heartwarming and I'm glad that it was a happy ending! You are such a talented writer! ALL of your stories need to get featured. It's too underrated!!!!!
ansson #4
..... to be honest i have no idea what i should say. it was.. amazing.
i was actually pretty lost most of the time, like just wondering what is going on, as i am not usually the best possible reader for stories that need some thinking.
still, i found this absolutely breathtaking, i could feel the emotions, the depression, confusion.
Still, the way it ended, how it was Yunho after all the one lost in his own world came as a bit of a shock to me. And i like the way you made the fifth chapter. it just... lightened things up.
And this fan fiction is absolutely one of my favorites.
So thank you, so much for writing it!!
and i am sorry for a crappy comment, it would be easier if English was my first language... X)

anyways, thank you and keep up the awesome work!!! :))