AUTHOR'S NOTE

Innocent Confession
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First of all, I would like to thank all of you who subscribed, commented and upvoted my fanfiction! I really appreciate every subscribers who read my story, every commenters who interacted with me and every upvoter for supporting this fanfiction! They all mean a lot to me so, thank you so much!

Now, onto the author's note that nobody wants but I feel the need to do anyway. I would like to take a moment to thank my friend for giving me the idea for this fanfiction. Due to his boredom when it comes to exams, he decided to write a freaking essay about his first crush, which was somewhat like how I described here. When I first saw the prompt of the week, I immediately thought about my friend's first crush story, so yeah, if it weren't for him I wouldn't have been able to make this story come true.

That's basically all I wanted to say for this A/N, that this fanfiction was actually inspired from an actual event. It may not be 100% the same, but it's still based on it nonetheless. Other than that, thank you for reading and hope you guys enjoyed the fanfiction!

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dksray #1
Chapter 1: WHY IS THIS STORY SO CUTEEEE WHYYYYYYYYYY. Oh my heart oh myy
upgrader #2
Chapter 1: This was cute, it was fun to imagine Chanyeol following Kyungsoo around like a little martial arts protege duckling. I admire that you wrote longer paragraphs which is something that goes against the usually stylistics of fanfics with shorter paragraphs and more dialogue. However, I will say that the long sentences and multiple dash breaks made it difficult to follow in some places. I'm happy that there was a lot of detail, especially since you gave each character their own personality and descriptions. But at times, like someone else said below, there was too much description and it just made the flow feel too heavy. In the future, I would love to see more of a focus on emotions and facial expressions because you do have a lovely hand at descriptions.

Another random thing (that's not a big deal) is that you were inconsistent in italicizing judo, which made me randomly stress the word in my head while reading. It was just a small detail, but it did occasionally distract me from the story whenever it happened.

Overall, this was a really sweet and lovely read. You did a great job, can't wait to see more from you!
exoforever259 #3
Chapter 1: Wow that was honestly so cute and fluffy (^o^)
meloluvie #4
Chapter 1: That was so cute! This is the kind of fluff I like. So refreshing and nicely written!
VIP2NEXO #5
Chapter 2: wow, just wow
Solliee12 #6
Chapter 1: This was absolutely adorable!!
whistles #7
Chapter 1: this really reminds me of the movie kyungsoo was in, "hyung"! i bet you've seen that too? chanyeol as kyungsoo's number one fan- i think it's implied and then learning from him, it's so fluffy and cute! the beginning felt way more elaborate than the end though, i would imagine kyungsoo's heart breaking at the first realization that chanyeol possibly did not like his back- rather than just one line that his mind was in a jumble. but overall it's quite a well rounded story with sufficient time for characters to fall in love, which i really appreciate so much more than love at first sight, so thank you!
hongjoomania #8
Chapter 1: GOSH THIS WAS SO CUTE THANKS A LOT AUTHOR
OnceUponAnEXO 18 streak #9
Chapter 1: This is soooo cute and fluffy!!! (/♥ω♥)/ asdfgjkllhfdfkl!!! I really liked it!!!

One tip though, be careful of over explaining things or adding unnecessary details that will actually distract from the storyline, not add to it. For example, when Chanyeol came and sat
in front of Kyungsoo, you used an explanation clauses with dashes to tell why the seat was empty. Just stating that the seat was empty would have been enough. The reader will automatically assume the person moved to do their own thing during the break. For me, it pulled me away from what was happening with Chanyeol and Kyungsoo, so it took my brain a second to be like, "Wait, what was happening here?" when it came back to them. This is actually something I have trouble with myself (since I love to add all those extra little details ^^;) so I have to either force myself to leave them out, or write them into my first draft and just edit them out later (⌒_⌒;) I hope this was helpful ♥
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