Zero Requiem

 

PROMPT 13: Two warring magician's who are always causing one disaster after another. More of a comedic approach to fantasy.

 

 

Characters Used: VIXX

Genre: Fantasy

Length: 15 chapters

 

 

PLOT

Use of the Prompt
So I'm not going to lie. When I first wrote the prompt I was picturing something much more light hearted and amusing. Your story, despite being comedic in the delivery, is such a whirlwind of emotions! And honestly, I don't think I would have enjoyed it half as much as I did if you had stuck with my imaginings of the prompt. So yes, I thought that you took this prompt and not only told the story beautifully, but you played so much with emotions and genres that I am just in LOVE. Believability
Okay. So before anyone gripes, I am going off of it is believable in a fantasy themed world. Can the events take place in the boundaries of the world you've created? So. In my humble opinion, they absolutely can. I really loved one thing in particular that many writers of fantasy tend to overlook: you gave your magicians AND your deities limits. There were no 'all-powerful' beings within your story and as an avid fantasy reader, I cannot even begin to express how much I appreciated that. All in all I felt as if this could be a world just out of sight and I loved that. Setting
Okay I'm going to pick just a little bit real fast. When you've got traveling going on in an epic story such as this, give a bit more description and background to the places they travel through just to help it come more to life. It runs the risk of falling a tad flat if you don't describe the places and why it's different from the last place they were. I think maybe you got rushed to complete it and that's what happened, because in your beginning chapters you were quite strong with the setting o