I Want To Know You

Title (4/5pts): The title do fit the story well but honestly, it didn't catch my attention though. 

Description & Foreword (10/10pts): The summary gets the reader to want to read more. It kind of compliments the title so even if the title isn't catchy, there's the summary to magnetise the readers. To be frank, the description was the one that got me giving your story a try. The trick in making people to click your story and read it is to have them see either the title or summary, or if possible both, to go "hmm, sounds interesting" or "I wonder what's gonna come next"  

Characters (10/10pts): Okay, so I am a Chen/Lay bias but I'm really reviewing in an unbiased way. Different people may want different characterisation for these idols but for me, I really like it. It really reflects how I saw Lay at first. He was really quiet and and don't say much. So the fact that my first impression of Lay is the same on how he acted towards Jongdae got me to be more into the story. It also made me want to know if he would change in the end. As for Jongdae, his personality is very mundane. Humans would eventually stop caring when they experience rejection after rejection. So, I love how even though this is fiction, there's reality sprinkled onto it.

Plot (18/20pts): For plot, I usually look for creativity and originality. You got the creativity part but the originality, maybe not much. I have read stories similar plot to yours and I guess the orignality kind of dropped. However, I don't blame you. And don't get me wrong, I like this kind of plot. There are millions of stories out there, so when it comes to originality of the story, authors find it hard to do because almost the ideas they have in mind are taken. In addition, we are able to write stories due to some stories that were read or some life experiences. So creativity really have to come into the story. Even if it is the same plot, the content is different. So, yes, your content is different and out of all the stories I've read that has a similar plot, yours is one of the good ones. 

Making music and writing stories is like the same. Music may sound the same to some people but the content will mostly be different to get people wanting to listen to them. 

Mechanics [Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Syntax, etc] (20/20pts): Okay, so I won't really point out anything here because your mechanics are perfect. There might have been some careless errors somewhere but as a whole, it's pefect. I'm lazy to edit my errors all the time so I won't penalise you for that. Keep on writing like this! Good job!

Flow (9/10pts): Hmm, the flow is good but sometimes I want to know more what had happen in between. Nonetheless, your flow of the story is excellent so keep it up. Make sure to never ever rush things because it will kind of ruin the story (happened to me sometimes)

Descriptive words (10/10pts):  Nothing much to say for this because your descriptive words are marvelous. There's nothing to critic about that so I won't say much. Your vocab is superb, good work! But never add words that are never heard of. I remember reading this story and there was so much unknown words to me that I gave up reading it. On the other hand, yours is otherwise. I can see that you're adept in using these words in writing. I really like it. Your use of words is deep but understandable. It is enough to let the reader be able to depict the scene that you're trying to write.

Visual things (4/5pts): There are some dialouge that confuses me but I won't point them out. The way you put it is acceptable but I'm used to reading dialouge in one paragraph but it is up to the author if they want to put dialouges in separate para or not. Other than that, everything is good!

Ending (5/10pts): To be frank, I felt empty when I read the last chapter. What I mean is that, I didn't connect with the story as much as I did at first. It's a pity though, the story is good. I felt like the end was kind of rushed and I got to admit that I also do that with some of my stories. Your story should be like a mountain- gradually going to the of story and decelerating constantly to the end of the story. Not like a cliff whereby the is there then suddenly all the readers are like splashed in the faces in shock because the ending was rash. However, the ending is good. I like happy endings. 

Extra Comments/Notes: I'm really glad to come across this story. I'm really happy and jubilant that this story is a ChenLay story.  I'm looking forward to reading your future works! 

Total: 90/100