Can You Stay?

Title (2/5): Since reviews are supposed to be honest, the title didn't really catch my attention. However, the title goes well with the oneshot. 

Description & Foreword (10/10pts): They were well done. While reading them, my heart felt the angst of the story. I knew that there would be sadness that I would feel when I would read your story and I was right! From just your foreword, it made me want to read your story. It was well-written. Short and simple but just enough to spark curiosity in me. 

Characters (10/10): I like how Kyuree was so calm and understanding. She isn't really a clingy wife but she just wanted his time even if it was just for a while. I like how she isn't some whiny girl which I see from a lot of OC that I have read which irritates me to death. However, their story plot makes up for it. For your case, your main girl was perfect and your story went well with her character. For Byunghun, he is an . Seriously, if I was her, I would have want him to suffer a bit because he deserves it. I admit that he's sweet but he can't just do that to her. Ugh, i'm so frustrated with him. Good thing the girl's very nice. I'm sorry for the reaction but I'm really feeling your story. hehehehe. 

Plot (16/20): It's not unique because I've seen many of this kind of plot all around AFF. The way you wrote your plot was well-written and you had a different writing style to other authors who had the same kind of plot as you. It made me feel the sadness and angstiness which is different from the other stories which are alike to yours. I really felt everything that were supposed to be felt.

Mechanics [Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Syntax, etc] (18/20pts): Come on, let's be honest, your mechanics are like 99% perfect. I don't even know what to say about this story's mechanics but maybe I'll point some errors which might had been careless errors.

13 paragraphs after the flashback-

"is she pulled it off" - "if she pulled it off"

"Besides from her clothes,there was little to remind her of this- besides her memories" - "Besides from her clothes and memories, there was little to remind her of this" . You repeated "besides" two times and the sentence's wrong. 

I guess that's all that I could find which is a good thing! You're mechanics are good so keep it up!

Flow (6/10pts): I felt that the end was rushed which you said so yourself. It would have been better if one chapter is the leaving and angst and the last chapter for the make up of the couple. 

Descriptive words (10/10pts): Vocab's good and keep up your writings like this!

Visual things (5/5pts): Font style and size are readable and paragraphings are well done. 

Ending (6/10pts): As I said, it was kind of rushed and I hope that you had elaborated the ending a bit more. 

Extra Comments/Notes: Your mechanics are excellent and so is your vocabulary. Just work on your flow at the ending. ^^ Thank you for requesting~

Total: 83/100