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Title (5/5): The title's good. It's different than the usual titles I have read so far.

Description & Foreword (8/10pts): They're good but I hope the description was done better because your story needs more views. Maybe something that's eye-catching? 

Characters (10/10): The characters are good. The main was a really  poor thing. My heart felt like it was clenching from the pain that the boy went through. Oh gosh, I'm serious. The story is really good. 

Plot (19/20): It's really angsty. Though the plot is something kinda predictable, it's something I rarely see here on AFF. So based on the stories I have read in this ssite, your plot's excellent. 

Mechanics [Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Syntax, etc] (20/20pts): Your mechanic's is splendid overall. No mistakes were spotted and the use of punctuations were good. Keep it up!

Flow (10/10pts): Flow is great! Scenes were describe so well and at a nice pace. 

Descriptive words (10/10pts): You know when I realised that English wasn't your first language, I was like "Really? Are you serious?!" REALLY, GOOD JOB at your vocabulary. 

Visual things (5/5pts): Good fonts and paragraphings. 

Ending (10/10pts): The ending was good and well written. Seriously, I'm really amazed at your writing. Consider publishing a book someday ><

Extra Comments/Notes: Your writing skill is perfect (so that's why I have nothing much to say) and I really hope people will read your stories. Thanks for requesting!

Total: 97/100