Review: The Difference Between a o and a Drama

By: ClouDYesung

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Title: (4/5)

Congrats! It's a very unique title, if I may say so myself. It was very eye-catching. For me, as a reader, I would definitely read your story. It's because I want to know what's the difference between a o and a drama. I don't know the difference really. O.O

 

Description/ Foreword: (9/10)

It was really interesting. Putting something like an advertisement for a new movie totally works! Plus, putting a summary, and some dialogues from the story makes the people interested. When I read it, I was enthusiastic to click the next button.

 

Plot: (25/25)

The plot was very unique. I haven't read any fic that has a plot like this. I don't know if there are fics with a similar plot, but your fic is the first one that I read with that kind of plot.

 

Grammar: (17/20)

It was good actually. Though occassionally I would encounter some grammatical errors. But if a reader is not much as a grammar nazi as I am, they won't notice it.

 

Examples:

 1. Yeah it was an amazing feel but sometimes the actor needs privacy.

It should be:

Yeah , it was an amazing feeling, but sometimes , the actor needs privacy.

 

2.Donghae widen his eyes and started to scan around his surroundings, because the three girls were walking  his way.

It should be:

Donghae widened his eyes and started to scan his surroundings because the three girls were walking towards his way.

 

Note: It's not bad to use a comma. Sometimes, you have to use commas to indicate pauses. 

You should also be consistent with your tenses. Don't mix up past tense with a present tense. It might make the reader dizzy. Check the story and edit some sentences, there are only a few left anyway that needs some editing with the grammar.

 

Characters: (13/15)

Your characters are easy to understand. Donghae is someone who wants to be famous and he also wants to be the Drama King. Hyukjae is someone who seems kind for me. I don't know because the story only has 3 chapters. So I can't tell Hyukjae's character very much. 

 

Flow: (7/10)

It was alright, but it was quite slow. I was wondering when will the shooting for the movie start? I was anticipating for the movie very much. Plus, I think you should make the pace faster. I don't know but maybe you have something planned. I won't argue with that if you have already planned what will happen every chapter.

 

Writing Style: (5/5)

Honestly, I have no comment for your writing style. Just keep up the good work. It's awesome.

 

Overall Enjoyment: (9/10)

I enjoyed it very much. It was a cute story. I'm telling you the truth. ^.^

 

Total: (89/100)

 

Bonus: (5/5)

I really enjoyed it. It was my first time reading that kind of plot. I even subscribed, so author-nim, update please!!!!

 

New Total: (93/100)

 

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