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REviewed by. Jang naru the night of the
sakura tree hill
yozora-hoshi Genre: slice of life, introspection, nostalgia, romance
Characters: jongup (BAP) & nika (OC)
Rating: 6 / 7 stars
Length: CHAPTERED [completed]
"In the end, the Universe tends to unfold as it should." Follow nika and jongup on A story about introspection, nostalgia, life in the mountains, and the brilliant gift that is the Universe. story title
At first glance, the title catches attention because of its non-mainstream and mysterious ingredients. After reading the story, though, I find the title to fit perfectly as the main symbol of the story. I do advise that you change ‘of’ to ‘at’ since the Sakura Tree Hill is a place not an event or happening.
foreword and description
The idea is there, and it is a great one. I like how it acts as a very short prologue that introduces the main characters and gives origin to the story’s title. Your foreword is written nicely, but it doesn’t mean that there is no room for improvement. First, I strongly advise that you recheck the verb tense - try to think and decide which tense, past or present, will suit your foreword the best and apply that tense throughout the end. (Note: The foreword could be of a different tense from the main storyline) Second, in order to really capture the reader’s attention, you need to be able to present your prologue in a creative way (e.g. quotes, in poem structure, etc.) I give points for starting it off with a wonderful quote and then following it up with the brief summary. I suggest you separate the last statement from the summar
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Reminders. PLEASE DO NOT FORGET TO CREDIT THE SHOP AND THE REVIEWER. MAKE SURE YOU HAVE READ AND ABIDED ON ALL THE RULES STATED IN THE FOREWORD.
REviewed by. Jang naru the night of the
sakura tree hill
yozora-hoshi Genre: slice of life, introspection, nostalgia, romance
Characters: jongup (BAP) & nika (OC)
Rating: 6 / 7 stars
Length: CHAPTERED [completed]
"In the end, the Universe tends to unfold as it should." Follow nika and jongup on A story about introspection, nostalgia, life in the mountains, and the brilliant gift that is the Universe. story title
At first glance, the title catches attention because of its non-mainstream and mysterious ingredients. After reading the story, though, I find the title to fit perfectly as the main symbol of the story. I do advise that you change ‘of’ to ‘at’ since the Sakura Tree Hill is a place not an event or happening.
foreword and description
The idea is there, and it is a great one. I like how it acts as a very short prologue that introduces the main characters and gives origin to the story’s title. Your foreword is written nicely, but it doesn’t mean that there is no room for improvement. First, I strongly advise that you recheck the verb tense - try to think and decide which tense, past or present, will suit your foreword the best and apply that tense throughout the end. (Note: The foreword could be of a different tense from the main storyline) Second, in order to really capture the reader’s attention, you need to be able to present your prologue in a creative way (e.g. quotes, in poem structure, etc.) I give points for starting it off with a wonderful quote and then following it up with the brief summary. I suggest you separate the last statement from the summar
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