Title: IF I (x)

Author: Bluedawn24 (x)

 Title: (3/5) The title doesn't seems eye-catchy. As for me, it's better if you change 'What if?'

But never judge a story by it's title right? Btw, What if is one of my all-time-fave Exo's song ^^ 

Poster:(5/5) Oh my I really love the poster. It focus on D.O who looks shoooo carming, shooooo nice, flawless, awesome, attractive and asdfghjkl. Can't get enough words to describe it! *fangirling*

Foreword: (5/10) Hm. For this, if I were you, I would prefer to write:

The worst thing ever in my entire life?

It's when I was in my senior year at the high school.

That guilty feeling still lingering in my heart. 

UNTIL NOW.

Yeah, I think it's better if you write that. The rest of it, it's well-written.

 I think the use of words 'the guilty feeling towards him still lingering in my head' are not suitable enough since usually feelings involve heart not mind. Plus, you should write 'until now' in capital letters to give an emphasis on that word.

Anyway, it's just a small mistake and hope you'll fix it. :)

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