Chapter 1: This story is nice in a simple manner. I think it's pretty good that you have incorporated beings such as angels into this (by which I mean the perpetual one-sided conversations). Chen having mentioned "I would be your moon and sun if you want," is quite cheesey yet heart-warming at the same time for a reader like me.
If you would like some constructive criticism, I can point out a thing or two. Of course, if you don't want to see this part of my comment, feel free to disregard or skip it. Firstly, I wanted to say that there are minimal errors like (I had no cents in my pocket so I stop my study) which can be better written as (I had no cents in my pocket so I had to stop pursuing my studies) or something along those lines. Next, I'm certain that you meant (desert) for the sentence (I started to dessert myself from people) because the word (dessert) refers to sweet treats like cakes. I'm sure that was an honest blunder, (:
I hope that you will receive this feedback well. I strongly believe that every writer, be it a oneshot or a series, deserves to know the honest opinion of another. If I have offended you in any way, I would like to extend my apologies in advance. Thank you, and have a nice day! ^^/
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