The title fits the story perfectly. Luhan is indeed chasing something so impossible for him. Loving how the title really connecting the feels with the story.

Maybe too long for my liking. It seems like you wanted to fit as much information as possible in the description and foreword. It doesn’t affect the story much but maybe too long for my liking.

Very simple and fits the story nicely. But I wish to see something more complicated for the graphic to express the feels of the story to the readers. Some readers love to see graphic of the story first before reading it.

Full credits for the character development. Oh god, honestly, I love Luhan in this story. And I really hate Xiumin ugh. But nevermind hehe. The way Luhan changes every single day, with every single problems he needs to deal with including his feelings for Xiumin. Every characters in this story developed really well. Good job 

Well done with the structure of your story. Well planned and easily read with that big font :)

I freaking love the ending. Leave it hanging. Don’t touch it. Full marks for the originality and plot. Well, what else I can say? Great work 

To be honest, your story flows slowly but in an exciting way. Excitingly slow that I'm actually reading every single word because I don't want to miss anything.

I absolutely have no problems with the way you write. Everything described perfectly and smoothly. Very clear and I do think your story reaches the readers very well.

I don’t think I found any spelling mistakes. Same goes to grammar mistakes. Well used grammar instead 

I truly enjoy your story. Maybe just need to work on the description and foreword. I'm looking forward for your future stories :) Great work and keep writing, author!