I don't think it'd be right for me to decide for you whether or not you should continue writing or cease to write all together. If it's something that you really enjoy doing then by all means continue on doing it. With that said, on a constructive criticism stance, this could use a lot of work. I'm assuming this was meant to be a one shot and it was a very short one at that. It confused me as to what the purpose of it was and I'm not sure all of the characters you listed were put into the one chapter. I'm still unaware of the relationships and how they are tied together. This isn't meant to shut you down and cause you to curl into a dark corner but from one writer to another its important to captivate the audience and still be able to tell the story so that it makes sense and interests the reader. This way, you'll get subscribers, comments and even votes. I'm not a perfect writer myself so I'm not coming at you to say I'm the best writer in the world because I know I'm not. I go through like 20 different drafts if I'm in a writing mood. That being said, I'd be glad to help you if you want. I'm free as a bird and have absolutely nothing to do but day dream and read other fan fictions.

Good luck on your writing journey :D