Contrivance

Reviewer: YifanForever

Title (5/5):
Contrivance is an eye catching title.  It's not a common word, which makes people curious to know what the story's about.  After reading the story, it's clear the title also makes sense in relation the ending in particular.  It's clear you gave the title some thought.

Graphics/Appearance (3/5):
Being quite honest, your poster does not look the part.  It's too simple.  It doesn't capture the mood of your story.  A good poster is the first thing a reader looks for.  They'll want to know if the story you've written suits them based on your graphic alone.  I suggest requesting from a better shop.  Also, I appreciate that you kept the font large enough to be read, but it's a little too big.  I suggest going down one font size; no more than that.

Description/Foreword (14/15):
Your description and foreword look alright.  There's not that much to criticize.  The only thing I would do without, is your Characters section.  Kai and Kyungsoo are already in your poster and we already know what they look like.  Other than that, I like the fact that it's simple and straightfoward, and it does a good job at setting the scene for the story to come. The grammar and spelling in the foreword is well done.  I can see that you've put some time into editing.

Characterization(13/20):
Your characterization only has a few flaws.  The character I could relate to most was Kyungsoo.  You did fine setting his character up, from him waking up outside Kai's dance studio to him not knowing how things worked in our time period, to the end of the story when we finally recieve our answers.  By the end, I found his character to be the one I cared about the most.  Kai was equally likeable as well.  You can see he genuinely loves Kyungsoo and that's he willing to do anything to keep them together.  He's hardworking and dedicated, and I like the fact you used his natural s