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Why howl when you can growl?_review shop ||closed|| busy finishing requests||Story title: The way back to life
Story link:http:// www.asianfanfics.com/story/ view/618789/the-way-back-to- life-angst-drama-romance- seunggi
Title(8points): Well your title hooks people up and makes them feel that it's gonna be very angst. And it kinda gives off the vibe that it's gonna be a life-death situation. So, they click on the title and scroll down.
Description(10 points): This one is very disappointing. After the really angst feel felt by the readers while they read the title, your description really turn them off. It's too simple and too boring. The writing style is used too much. And if you can, change the female protagonist name. People don't really read OCs with English names even if the story has an outstanding plot.
'Is this the begining of a love story?' WHAT THE ? TOO CLICHE AND BORING. I want to say for this is 'CHANGE THE DESCRIPTION!!'
Dialouge(15points): The dialouge is good except for that you forgot to put 'full stop' 'question mark' after every sentences of it.
Character's development(0): No character development founded! You put the girl as a damsel in distress when she's supposed to help Seunggi, not the other way around. And Seunggi is too kind and polite for a man in depression.
Plot(30points):
This one is even more disappointing. Forgive me. But it doesn't appeal that much to me or none at all. And I don't feel that much angst. It was so boring.
Comments: Choosing Seunggi as a character was not a very brilliant idea. And plus using the female main character as an English woman didn't do it any good. I suggest you change it to Exo and get co authors and beta readers. I didn't enjoyed it.
Overall points: 53 points.
A/N: I told you I'd be harsh though it's short. If you are satisfied with the review, do upvote and request again. ^^
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