You wrote this and didn't tell anyone? How dare you? XD Lol, I'm kidding, jie. ;)
It's really good. Really sad, but really good. May I suggest something? The beginning/middle is clearly a flashback, right? While the very last line is present-day? Next time, use italics for flashbacks - this lets the reader know that the particular event(s) happened in the past, and that sets it apart from the present. :) Just a tip, for future reference.
And aww, it's complete? But... :(
I guess it's up to the reader's imagination whether MiMi wakes up or not, then? Okay...
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