Chapter 1: it is so sad
please write more

Chapter 1: Who'd Have Known? Is a oneshot featuring Tiffany and Sunny as bestfriends and their progress into something more than friendship.

We follow the story from Tiffany's point of view in first person. The use of is isn't penalising, it enable us to feel closer to the main character.

The punctuation, vocabulary, syntax in all is great. There were confusion throughout the whole fiction however as Tiffany would talk about Soonkyu in third person "He is my bestfriend...", "I would sneak into his bedroom..." for most of it and then at one point it would change to the second person "I'd just wait for you until I heard your footstep..."

It seems like the doubt doesn't only touches that for the tenses used sometimes change. At the very beginning, the present tense is used "It's five o'clock in the morning and we're still..." and suddenly after that, the past tensed is used. This is a big mistake, how can the past be the future? Either it should start in the past tense and continue with the present tense since it happens later but not the other way round. You should define before writing what tense you are going to use and stick to it.

Another thing that bugged me is the use of the word "apparently" when Tiffany tells us about her living with Soonkyu, as if she doesn't even know if it is true when it concerns her ?

The plot in a whole is nice, nothing extraordinary but it's entertaining enough. The story is realistic, the characters likeable. Tiffany's character is a bit boring because of her lack of moves, thankfully Soonkyu makes actions that pushes the story further.

I fear there's not enough background behind the two relationship, it would be definitely a good thing to dwelve in more in their past, say what makes their friendship so special. There wasn't enough to really think "They are really acting special only towards each other" and it is a real shame.

The idea in itself wasn't bad, it just couldn't be totally explored. Thanks for writing this, I enjoyed reading !

More than the oneshot title, it's for the pairing that I'm here. There's no insight of the story nor writing in the foreword so I can say nothing.

Oneshots are okay, take your time writing it shouldn't be a pressure, just fun !

Chapter 1: Nice one shot!
Don't worry for your others stories, I can wait :)

Chapter 1: Nice!
No worries, just continue to write your stories. We'll be waiting patiently for your updates. :)