↳ ⋮ ▎章 TWO

「幸せ委員会 」` The Happy Committee ♡
CHAPTER TWO

what do you wish for?

 

From what Krystal had gathered from the conversations of the Happy Committee, she realized that they were a group of wealthy students whose parents had made the biggest donations to the school. Because of that, their parents were able “persuade” the principle into making their sons and daughters members of the student council. However, they had promptly changed their name to the Happy Committee since they didn’t want to intimidate their fellow peers.

There was Choi Jinri, the president, and face of the committee who happened to be a few months older than her. Not surprisingly, Amber was her second in command - in charge of welcoming the new students and bringing them in for a “happy orientation.” Then there was Luna, a cheerful smile seemed to be permanently plastered on her face, and although she looked like a girl who would be overly-talkative, she didn’t speak much- her role in the club was a mystery to Krystal. And finally, there was Victoria, a lady who looked too old to be in high school even with her youthful face. She, like Luna, was a woman of few words, but of course Krystal didn’t pay much attention to them, since well, they didn't really hold her attention by not saying anything. 

Every first monday of the month, the students of the Happy Committee would open the wishing well, and they would pick a few wishes made by the students to grant - this ranged from simple things like: “I want better grades”, where in, an intelligent member of the committee would take it upon themselves to tutor said student until her grades improved. Or it could even go so far as a student wanting a new car. In that case, since the council consisted of incredibly wealthy students, getting some of their family’s sponsors to give them a free car was nothing too difficult. But of course, this was also the reason why wishes were limited per month.

“So, Krystal-sshi. Since you’re a new student. You get one wish - do you have something in mind?” The taller girl, who had introduced herself as Jinri, asked, tilting her head inquisitively.

In normal situations, Krystal would've just let out one of her snide laughs, however if what they said was true - she could get something expensive like a car out of this. Of course, she didn’t have a driver’s license yet, but hey, who didn’t want a car? The eighteen year old allowed her tongue to peek out slightly as she her bottom lip, evidently deep in thought. 

Amber noticed the gears turning in the younger’s girl’s head and she instinctively leaned over to pat her back fondly, earning herself a dark glare.

“It doesn’t need to be something material you know? You could wish for popularity.”

Krystal really didn’t care for that. In all honesty, she preferred to stay out of the spotlight. 

“Intelligence.”

Her grades really weren’t that bad. 

“Respect.”

Nope, one of her usual glares usually got her all the respect she needed. 

“Love.”

At the sound of that word, a bitter laugh escaped her lips along with the words, “As if.”

Amber couldn’t help but smile broadly at her reaction. Krystal, realizing she had clearly shown interest (when she really didn’t want to) quickly dipped her head down, concealing her expression.

Anyway, how would they even get her love? Sure, they were ridiculously wealthy but she didn’t like the idea of having bought a boyfriend. Besides, the only person she had feelings for was Jonghyun and she was pretty sure he wasn't the type to be swayed by money.

Jinri also noticed the sudden change in Krystal’s mannerisms and in an attempt to bring some peace of mind to her peer, she quickly added, “If you have any problems, feel free to confide in us.”

The long haired Jung narrowed her eyes in suspicion towards the committee president, obviously unwilling to share her mini drama with a bunch of strangers.

“Really, we can help.” Amber piped up, the edges of her lips raising and forming a cheeky grin.

Pfft. All Krystal wanted to do was laugh at them. Just because they had money and had formed an overly-optimistic, albeit well-intentioned, club, they thought that they could fix any problems? Her reservations about them were pushed aside momentarily and suddenly she felt a need to challenge their pride. Maybe it was just a part of her nature to see people on pedestals fall down. Or maybe she just wanted them to face reality. Of course she felt guilty since they probably meant well, but at that moment, she felt like they were treating her as if she needed their charity, and she hated that.

“I’m certain the boy I like is going to reject me tonight. The only way for me to be happy is to get his love and approval.” Krystal finally stated in a rather uncouth and blank manner. Sure she wasn’t that lovestruck with Jonghyun that if he rejected her she would become a big crying mess, and even if she was, she would usually never admit to it like that - but she wanted to exaggerate her feelings.  

"Without paying or bribing him, I wish Jonghyun will want to be with me.”

The brunette had felt like she had made her point with that statement. She felt a rush of pride when she noticed their worried expressions when she had began her wish. But when she had finished, upon seeing the amused reactions of the girls in the committee, she felt her determination fading.

Amber was the first to speak up, “Ahhh. So that’s the situation?” She stretched her arms in front of her, linking her fingers together, as if getting ready to do something.

“Really Krystal, we get these kinds of wishes often, and I’ll tell you now, absolutely no money is involved and the couples we help stay together forever ~” Jinri chimed, standing up from her seat, holding her hands together in an overly girly manner, apparently figuring that she had known the brunette long enough to drop her formalities. 

Pfft. Forever. That got Jinri another mocking scoff from Krystal, but it fell unto deaf ears as the taller girl continued her giddy twirling.

“Really! It’s not a scam. There are many ways to obtain love. We are going to be your own posse of cupids! Like a soap opera, you know?” The girl insisted cutely, flailing her arms about, trying to make her point.

Sighing lightly at the latter’s unwavering resolve to prove the skill of the committee, Krystal could only nod wearily at what the girl said. Soap opera, cupid, what the heck. But what did she have to lose right? Besides, she felt like if she shot down Jinri too many times, the baby-faced girl would begin crying. Although Krystal had y tendencies, and as much as she disliked the premise of this club, she couldn’t find it within herself to deny Jinri’s naive tenacity anymore.

“Is that your wish?” The quiet Victoria finally questioned, interrupting Krystal’s train of thought. Her fingers gently clung onto a pen holding it centimeters above a white piece of paper.

“Yes.”

“And if we grant this wish - you’ll be happy?”

“...Hmph, I suppose.”

“Yes or no?”

Krystal was taken aback at the girl’s sudden seriousness as she quickly muttered a quiet ‘yes’.

“Granted.”

With that statement, the oldest girl scribbled something quickly onto the sheet of paper, folded it delicately and dropped it into large box filled with a countless amount of other fulfilled wishes.

 
whoop chapter two. that is all. i may add more chapters actually, since i really don't like how rushed the overall story feels. but ... it's a short story, how ... slow can it be? it probably could flow better but i'm stupid so. e n e ;
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aisssh #1
are you dropping this story? :(
pinboo
#2
Hello! I just sent you 500 karma points for being part of the Honorary Winners of my semi-contest. Congratulations! Sorry, it's through story comment. I cannot access your profile page.
pinboo
#3
Hello, here's your goody bag for joining my TMaF semi-contest! Thank you!

Plot: I'd have to say, I really enjoy it. In fact, it's one of the entries that I don't exactly need to force myself to read, because there's this something, there is this quirk to the plot –no matter how 'plain-and-sweet' everything was in the first three chapters. Perhaps it's instinctual, but I do find myself amused and intrigued reading the first part of the story –already knowing that something bad will happen, but I didn't know how it would happen. And when you have that twist in the fourth chapter –Bam, I absolutely adore it!

And what I absolutely love, is the genuine horror of it. It's not all the bloody-gore horror, not exactly a psychological horror (though this is debatable), but there's just something that...I don't know, when I finish reading the story, I was like smiling to myself, because I just simply adore the genuine tingle of creepiness in the whole realm of this fic. While the story does not exactly surprise me (I am quite an avid horror manga readers myself), but there's an absolute plus point in pulling this kind of feat in a fanfic. It's leaning to a disturbing kind of horror that can make you cringe or speechless, but it's a sensation that I enjoy very much nonetheless.
pinboo
#4
There are however, some unexplainable things in the story –mostly about the committee and how they actually exercise their work (maybe your third Taemin's chapter will reveal it though), about how the school and other authorities simply have no say in it (you indicate why the school and authorities work that way, but to me, it's not a sufficient explanation), just simple how's and why's. Not gonna dock your points much on that, though, because I do realize maybe the charm of the fic is the mystery of how this whole happy committee works out. Another comment is that I feel the ending (Chapter 4, I mean) is kind of rushed. I know that it's meant to be surprising with bang, but there are some conclusion that I feel a bit rushed –like how Jonghyun came up with that resolve. Maybe two or three paragraphs more as transitions would make it flow better. But overall, it's a very nice fic!
pinboo
#5
Characters: Likeable and realistic enough. I like Krystal and how she's more than the apathetic girl. I even absolutely love the fact that you gave motive to her character (Jessica's influence or something) in chapter 2 or 3 I forgot. There are reasons as to why she acts that way, and I love how perspective she was and I have to say, I enjoy her thoughts and opinions –she's a character readers can relate to. Jessica could have been 'pushed' a bit more. The way she's characterized here is fine, but there's just a bit of a stereotypical-big-sister characterization about her. Maybe because you don't dwell that much on her. Not that you have to, but considering that Jessica is actually part of the plot's part, maybe you would consider on adding more traits to her –and not just how she influences/interacts with Krystal (though of course, Jessica-Krystal's interaction is a definite must).

The Happy Committee...ah. Some are kinda 'shadowed' by the others, some shine on their own. I kinda 'forgive' you for this because Krystal kinda acknowledged it herself that some other characters of the Happy Committee are 'not interesting' enough for her. On the other hand, I also like the whole mysterious and unpredictable nature of the Happy Committee.

Jonghyun, is nearly non-existent in this fic. Partly, I can actually understand that, because his role in this story is more as a 'trophy' not as a dynamic character (and thus, that's kind of inevitable). Another part of me can't understand that though, since even Taemin and Minho, who have lesser screentime, can shine more in this fic (No, I'm not even counting the bonus Taemin's chapters. Even without those bonus chapters, 2Min kinda stole the attention mroe than Jonghyun did)
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#6
Style: I like it. To be honest, there isn't anything technically really engaging about your style, but in an unexplainable manner, your style charms me. I also like how even in the first part of the story (the part before we knew the true nature of the Happy Committee), even the light writing style still manages to make me feel curious –like, I keep on thinking 'there's got to be something'. Like a queerness in the whole ordeal, but I just like it. I like how there's this 'mysterious' aura even when the writing tone is dedicated for 'simple-high-school' plot. I also like the way you wrote when Krystal went ballistic –there's a pure hysteria and sense of disbelief that is captured very well.
pinboo
#7
Suggestion:
• This is minor, and may be a matter of preference, but the Hangul or whatever character is there on the title and chapter titles kinda make it less professional
• I think it'd be better if you add two more chapters, explaining more about the nature of the Happy Committee. Maybe you'd have the questions answered in the continuation of Taemin's story. If so, then that's good. Because some things still raise question marks. Sometimes it's good for the mystery element, but sometimes, it may be bad for the believability element of your fic.
• Add more focus on some characters.

Favorite Parts:
• I must say, how 'deceiving' everything was –from the poster, to the writing style – and what the readers actually got in the end.
• Taemin's bonus chapters. I really shudder especially at the part where it's explained what will happen to the anomalies.
• I really like most of the characters, mostly Krystal and Jinri.
• I like the mystery air that somehow moves me forward to read the fic :)
fxwhuut #8
Chapter 4: well you definitely got the reaction you wanted to get........

during the first three chapters i was like 'wtf what's up with the horror tags? there's nothing scary about this' but then this happened...i was like 'WOW OK WTH JUST HAPPENED' and i went to re-read it for like 3 times lololol (((take that back when i said it was cute uhm)))

THIS IS FOR A CONTEST RIGHT? I HOPE YOU'LL WIN
fxwhuut #9
Chapter 2: surprised there's no comment yet o_o

so yay!! i'm first?

anyway this is just too emm cute? idk i just find this cute haha:)