are you dropping this story? :(

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Plot: I'd have to say, I really enjoy it. In fact, it's one of the entries that I don't exactly need to force myself to read, because there's this something, there is this quirk to the plot –no matter how 'plain-and-sweet' everything was in the first three chapters. Perhaps it's instinctual, but I do find myself amused and intrigued reading the first part of the story –already knowing that something bad will happen, but I didn't know how it would happen. And when you have that twist in the fourth chapter –Bam, I absolutely adore it!

And what I absolutely love, is the genuine horror of it. It's not all the bloody-gore horror, not exactly a psychological horror (though this is debatable), but there's just something that...I don't know, when I finish reading the story, I was like smiling to myself, because I just simply adore the genuine tingle of creepiness in the whole realm of this fic. While the story does not exactly surprise me (I am quite an avid horror manga readers myself), but there's an absolute plus point in pulling this kind of feat in a fanfic. It's leaning to a disturbing kind of horror that can make you cringe or speechless, but it's a sensation that I enjoy very much nonetheless.

There are however, some unexplainable things in the story –mostly about the committee and how they actually exercise their work (maybe your third Taemin's chapter will reveal it though), about how the school and other authorities simply have no say in it (you indicate why the school and authorities work that way, but to me, it's not a sufficient explanation), just simple how's and why's. Not gonna dock your points much on that, though, because I do realize maybe the charm of the fic is the mystery of how this whole happy committee works out. Another comment is that I feel the ending (Chapter 4, I mean) is kind of rushed. I know that it's meant to be surprising with bang, but there are some conclusion that I feel a bit rushed –like how Jonghyun came up with that resolve. Maybe two or three paragraphs more as transitions would make it flow better. But overall, it's a very nice fic!

Characters: Likeable and realistic enough. I like Krystal and how she's more than the apathetic girl. I even absolutely love the fact that you gave motive to her character (Jessica's influence or something) in chapter 2 or 3 I forgot. There are reasons as to why she acts that way, and I love how perspective she was and I have to say, I enjoy her thoughts and opinions –she's a character readers can relate to. Jessica could have been 'pushed' a bit more. The way she's characterized here is fine, but there's just a bit of a stereotypical-big-sister characterization about her. Maybe because you don't dwell that much on her. Not that you have to, but considering that Jessica is actually part of the plot's part, maybe you would consider on adding more traits to her –and not just how she influences/interacts with Krystal (though of course, Jessica-Krystal's interaction is a definite must).

The Happy Committee...ah. Some are kinda 'shadowed' by the others, some shine on their own. I kinda 'forgive' you for this because Krystal kinda acknowledged it herself that some other characters of the Happy Committee are 'not interesting' enough for her. On the other hand, I also like the whole mysterious and unpredictable nature of the Happy Committee.

Jonghyun, is nearly non-existent in this fic. Partly, I can actually understand that, because his role in this story is more as a 'trophy' not as a dynamic character (and thus, that's kind of inevitable). Another part of me can't understand that though, since even Taemin and Minho, who have lesser screentime, can shine more in this fic (No, I'm not even counting the bonus Taemin's chapters. Even without those bonus chapters, 2Min kinda stole the attention mroe than Jonghyun did)

Style: I like it. To be honest, there isn't anything technically really engaging about your style, but in an unexplainable manner, your style charms me. I also like how even in the first part of the story (the part before we knew the true nature of the Happy Committee), even the light writing style still manages to make me feel curious –like, I keep on thinking 'there's got to be something'. Like a queerness in the whole ordeal, but I just like it. I like how there's this 'mysterious' aura even when the writing tone is dedicated for 'simple-high-school' plot. I also like the way you wrote when Krystal went ballistic –there's a pure hysteria and sense of disbelief that is captured very well.

Suggestion:
• This is minor, and may be a matter of preference, but the Hangul or whatever character is there on the title and chapter titles kinda make it less professional
• I think it'd be better if you add two more chapters, explaining more about the nature of the Happy Committee. Maybe you'd have the questions answered in the continuation of Taemin's story. If so, then that's good. Because some things still raise question marks. Sometimes it's good for the mystery element, but sometimes, it may be bad for the believability element of your fic.
• Add more focus on some characters.

Favorite Parts:
• I must say, how 'deceiving' everything was –from the poster, to the writing style – and what the readers actually got in the end.
• Taemin's bonus chapters. I really shudder especially at the part where it's explained what will happen to the anomalies.
• I really like most of the characters, mostly Krystal and Jinri.
• I like the mystery air that somehow moves me forward to read the fic :)
 

Chapter 4: well you definitely got the reaction you wanted to get........

during the first three chapters i was like 'wtf what's up with the horror tags? there's nothing scary about this' but then this happened...i was like 'WOW OK WTH JUST HAPPENED' and i went to re-read it for like 3 times lololol (((take that back when i said it was cute uhm)))

THIS IS FOR A CONTEST RIGHT? I HOPE YOU'LL WIN

Chapter 2: surprised there's no comment yet o_o

so yay!! i'm first?

anyway this is just too emm cute? idk i just find this cute haha:)