Can't Stop It

Arabesque

His heart skipped several beats. He felt that he owned the world for that moment when he met the girl. Heechul. It was Heechul who was feeling like that once the sight of the girl, or the princess namely Jessica flashed into his eyes in and out just like a disaster, since his heart was to be left for free by Song Jae. Donghae. It was Donghae who was melted by the beautiful gorgeous sad girl who stole his heart in 45 minutes. Wow. They were supposed to be term with the word ‘WOW’.


“Hyung, hyung!!”

Leeteuk who had given his back to Heechul turned to look at the direction where he heard the shout. Heechul’s breaths were getting louder every time once he inhaled and exhaled.

“What happened to you, again, for god’s sake? Don’t you know that your brenisis’ cells might be ruined if you’re continuing on like this? When will you stop all this??”

Leeteuk’s words were a bit harsh for an outsider, but for them (Suju, or Super Junior), it were sweet normal sentences (it might sound a bit weird, but it is said sweet normal sentences as they have already heard the worst blames ever).

Carefreely as ever, Heechul replied.

“Hyung~~~ I never thought that you would be looking down on Song Jae that much. I better tell him right now. Just kidding.”

“Pfftt. Like I really care. Anyway, what was the main point of you, rousingly calling me out before?

“I had an accident just before I arrived here.”

“Seriously?? Any damages??”

“Are you crazy? We’re made of the strongest metals ever, hyung!!”

“You’re the one who’s crazy. Why must I ask whether you are injured or not? I was having my attention placed on the white Ferrari that you just borrowed from me this morning, you bastard!”

For a while, Heechul sewed his lips tighly.

“Aisshhhh! Hyung! How could you be this much cold-blooded? You were not even worrying a single thing of me, but the Ferrari! Damn you, Ferrari!”

“Bwahahaha!! What now? You are jealous at the non-living thing, the Ferrari? Oh Gosh! Can you not? Let’s stop it and get to the main point, dude!”

“Arraseo! And that little disaster who hit your Ferrari was a very pretty and attractive princess I’ve ever seen!! Her name’s Jessica. Jung Jessica. Isn’t it a lovely name?? Wahhh!! I can’t stop it!! I just can’t stop it!!”

“Can’t you make it short to the point? Can’t stop what?”

“I can’t stop and hold myself from falling for her all over again and again..... Ahh!! I feel like I’m like fanboy-ing. Hahahahaha”

Heechul’s laughter was heard all along the corridor. Leeteuk got ashamed of his blood-related stupid brother, and couldn’t help, but dragged him back to their room.


It was not only Heechul who couldn’t help himself from falling over the princess that he had met on the day. Donghae was also uncontrollable in their room. He was just figuring like a rock statue.

Being the maknae, Kyuhyun was matured than Heechul and Donghae. He raced himself to Leeteuk who was making an entrance to their messy room together with the crazy-going Heechul. When he received the information from Kyuhyun about what’s going on with Donghae, he also got tired (his mind, but not his body).

“So, you, Donghae, what happened again to you today?” He asked as he dropped Heechul’s body in loud BANG!

“This noon while I was having a ride around the city to enjoy its magnificent landscape, some magnificent person appeared on the bridge of Han, trying to do some un-magnificent things.”

“Stop those magnificent-s and start to get to the point.” He mumbled himself. “Eeesh. Such kids.”

“A very pretty and gorgeous girl was trying to jump off from the Han bridge!!! This is so un-magnificent sight, eh?”

“So whaattt??”

“How could you ever say ‘so whaattt??’??, hyung? Eeesh. Never mind. Then I pulled her down and she dropped on me!! AHH!! That was so awesome, hyung! So awesome!”

“Again?? What day is today? Why are both of them acting weird than ever? I guess today’s not my day.”

Teuk accepted the big sigh that he exhaled out of his lungs.

“And that you can’t stop falling for her all over again and again?”

“Whoahhohoo!! How come my Teuk hyung knows how I am feeling right now? Anyway, that’s a positive thing for me, right  hyung?”

He mumbled again. “Positive for you. Negative for me.”

“Hyung, I heard you saying something. Pardon?”

“Nothing special.”

“Okie then..”

Lalalalala. He was singing the whole night.


That night, Leeteuk was considering very carefully for the whole thing that was happening to Heechul and Donghae. Due to his secret researches upon the Super Junior project by Song Jae, the 13 super-humans were ought to fall only for the true partners of their lives who loved them and whom they loved.

He knew that unstoppable feelings were developing in their metal hearts. But based on the theory, once the super-humans found their real love and partners of their lives, their strengths, powers, abilities, bones, brenisis and hearts were all going to lose the powers and they’ll start to find the endless pain in themselves as fast as possible.

He knew how the cells in the brenisis were constructed and for the sakes of his brothers who would soon found their real partners, he decided to work out on one against law on the theory that Song Jae and Eun Soo had made.

His plan was to help his brothers find their true loves and to succeed in creating new simple lives. And last of all, which was the most important plan and thing, was, that to create a solution not to harm his brothers in anyway and for them to be able to live forever in this world.

He trusted. He believed. He believed that his brothers won’t let him down even though the world they were living in was not all about happiness, romance and joy, but also attached together with violence, cruel and darkness.


A/N: Hi again, readers! Here goes chapter 6 of this fic. This chapter is all about the reaction and the feelings of the boys’. Anyway, I hope you guys enjoy it. And I get to know today that readers really prefer exoshidae version than supergeneration version of this fic. But, whichever version you guys prefer, I’ll be continuing to write a better fic than before and to create better chapters onwards. Thank you for supporting me~~ ^^

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pinboo
#1
Hello, here's your goody bag for joining my TMaF semi-contest!

Plot: Alright, first of all, I think your fic is one of the longest one –in terms of chapters, at least so far that I've been judging and I applaud you for that determination –although, maybe, unfortunately, I regret that you don't finish it.

Firstly, I have to say that the actual story is kinda different from what I expected based on my reading of your foreword/story description. I was expecting it to be a gangfight/spy type of a story, but the romance/drama fills nearly 80% of the plot. Which is not a bad thing, but in your fic, I do think a less romance approach would be more suitable.

The flow is also one of the aspects of the story that I feel could have been improved. There are 10 chapters already (I'm not counting the 11th chapter because it's just author notes), and it should have been sufficient to move the plot to a more intriguing level. The first 4 chapters, in my opinion, could have been summarized in one or two chapters. The first 4 chapters only discuss about the background of the story, and you drag it too long just to talk about the reason why Eunsoo wishes to establish the GG project. Then the remaining chapters talk about the loveline development –which, in contrary to the 4 earlier chapters – become both too long and too fast at the same time. It's too fast to develop their romantic feelings to each other (the characters fell in love way too fast), and at the same time, it's too fast, considering that nothing really meaningful happen –and I personally do not consider them falling for each other as a strong development.

The possibilities and potency of the story actually exists. If you add more actions or mystery or other elements that could make the story more intriguing, I think it would be better. I also get the feeling as if you do not exactly know the direction of the story, so you should take your time to compose and control the plot before you execute/implement it.
pinboo
#2
Characters: I particularly really understand how hard it is to maintain a story with more than 15 characters. And while I clearly do enjoy the numerous SuperGeneration interaction here and there, there is undoubtedly a bigger burden to manage the characters. Firstly, there is no real distinctive trait of one character from another. Jessica being the cold girl is one trait, but it's not dug deep enough, and it is still hard to set one apart from the other. This relates further on the character interactions –which I find to be kind of repetitive and there is no real dynamic on the relationship between one character and the other or one pairing and another.

I think that the big amount of characters also make you lose control/focus of the story. Of course, I'm not saying that you may not use a lot of characters. You undoubtedly may, but you also have to have a strong rein over the characters. On one part we're focusing on Heesica, then we're moving to Yoonhae, then to Taeteuk, then to HanSeoSung. Again, this is actually fine, but the transition is too abrupt and there's no real different premises in each pairing. Sure, they met in different situation, but it's still not sufficient to make the readers actually can linger or feel the relation to a character or a pairing.
pinboo
#3
Style: There are things that I think you can improve: first, do not focus too much on unnecessary description. Description is fine –it livens a story. But readers do not need to know what kind of perfume Eunsoo uses or the car that Heechul drove unless they substantially correlate with the plot. Secondly, do not combine two or more characters' dialogue in one paragraph. Thirdly, minimize the use of Korean. I think the readers can tolerate the general sayings such as "Unnie" or "Oppa", because these are the words that do not have the translation in English that would give the exact same implication. But there are parts where your dialogue are entirely in Korean, and it would only trouble the readers –and you do not want to trouble your readers. You may tease or confuse readers, but you do not want the readers to get so troubled reading your story that eventually they may stop reading it. I also think you could have used more narrative text, but this is not major. I think the dialogue's amount is still in the appropriate level at first; but in the later part of the stories, the story basically is littered with filler dialogues.
pinboo
#4
Suggestion:
• Pick a character and focus on him/her –at least until you are able to maintain the stability of the plot. Once your plot is stabile, you may eventually try to shift the focus to other characters. To be honest, until this point, I do not exactly know who your main character is.
• If you really want to use a lot of characters, introduce them slowly. Get the readers to be accustomed with the character first, before you introduce the others. Otherwise, the additional characters would only serve as filler sidekicks.
• Add more action, suspense, thrill –something to actually make your story more dynamic.


Favorite Parts:
• The foreword is actually kind of interesting –it promises something. It's a bit too dragging and you may wish to add something else to differ your fic from the other though, because it is not the only theme in AFF.
• You seemed to have taken a bit of scientific research for the first part of the story. I do not know and do not have the leisure to check on the truth behind it, but I obviously commend you for the willingness to research.
• I do like the title. But there should be more relation between the title and the story though
• Your narration reads better than the dialogue. Maybe you can focus on the narration.
catherine123 #5
Chapter 11: Lazy girl. I thot a chapter of story was updated. -.- hont
baechimi
#6
This is Webtoon Graphics. Your request was done.
roodlesnamen
#7
Chapter 10: Such random couples, lol. XD
catherine123 #8
Chapter 10: Dramas coming soon, eh? Btw, Trigonometic loves?lol i jst did the trigo sums and i read this now. xD
pompompoop #9
Chapter 10: aeyyy..i guess theres gonna be drama?? :((
roodlesnamen
#10
Chapter 9: Love triangles? Yesss, more drama. <3