Kiss me better

Description

You: You act shy when meeting new people, but when you get to know them you are the most craziest person around! You are 15 turning 16. You go to a public school and you are in year 10. You only like going outside you house if you are heading to netball, a party, the city or a friends house. You work in a supermarket, but you hate it there. AND MOST IMPORTANTLY! You have never had a boyfriend let alone kiss a boy before!

Key: He is so crazy and out there. He takes his camera everywhere, and is pretty well know for being a man . If you talk to him by himself he is genereally nice, but when around other people he acts like a jerk. He has more covered up secrets than you know of. He goes to the same school as you but is in year 11. he is 16 turning 17. He is never at his house, always at partys... you can guess what he does at them... :P

Hoon: He is always with Key, they are the crazy duo, never apart. He is never behind a camera but in basically every photo. He is a crazy fun guy. He has graduated high school and is studying car engineering at tafe. He is 18 turning 19. Hoon is generally the class clown, always mucking around. He is a pro shuffler, who loves graf art.

Yuri: She is your older sister. She is best friends with Hoon and Key. She was in the same year as Hoon, so she had also graduated last year and was studying massage thearapy at tafe. she is 18 turning 19. She has a boyfriend who bascically lives at your house, but he is pretty cool, so you learn to live with him. Yuri can be a brat sometimes, but since she moved out she is becoming a better and better sister to you.

Foreword

 

Basically your older sister is Yuri and she likes to hang around with key and Hoon. They are always off somewhere stupid, doing stupid things, always documenting what they do by taking a picture like every second. You get introduced to Key and Hoon one day and instantly you get a crush on key. You try to hang out with him more and talk to him, then you find out your parents and his parents have one thing in common… fighting. Yes now’s your chance to finally try to understand him.

While you get confused about Key, someone tries to sneek in from the side and wisk you away off your feet as soon as they finds out you have a thing for key. That really confuses you...

Do you like Key or do you like Hoon....?

 

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This is my first attempt ever at fanfic writing, so please if you have any suggestions or comments feel free to tell me. :D

Comments

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MintyPetals
#1
Looks kyuteee
bananamilk- #2
Yup yup, what @musicallyjulz said is good advice really Michii lol, it's a lot easier to read a fic with conversation set out vertically rather than the way you have it now. Not that it's a dreadful way to write it or anything of course!! BUT it's better that way imo~ sounds alright so far ^^ good luck~ starting a fic is one thing, but keeping a fic going is another story.... the most challenging part tbh xD
Pastel-hearts
#3
hmmm, your chapter one eh. (just my opinion, don't be offended ^^) <br />
umm, when you type conversations, it's much better when you do it like this :<br />
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key said, "...."<br />
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"..." she said.<br />
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"...." he said back. <br />
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it's like reading it vertically. :) heehee. Because im usually having a hard time reading the conversations horizontally. anyways, this is just an opinion so no hard feelings~<br />
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:) wish u luck!!! :) update soon~ :) it's okie if you wanna write like that. :) heehee <3 :)
dubudibidis
#4
Woah... your fast! But thanks for the update... and s'all good...the first chapter seems interesting and I agree with musicallyjulz...I LOVE KEY TOO... as awesome as Hoon is, Key is my bias in u r story rite now ... lol, good job so far and update soon :D<br />
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Thanks~
Pastel-hearts
#5
HAHAHA. UPDATE~ I LIKE KEY!! <3 :)
dubudibidis
#6
Ooo~ your story sounds cool =) AND it has Key and Hoon! Lol.. I like it already ;] <br />
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Update soon please and good luck for your first fanfic =D