Made It

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Lee Byunghun was a big dreamer. Ever since he was a little boy, he always wanted to be an idol. He wanted to dance and sing and be on tv to show the world his talents. Everyone laughed at him though. They told him to stop being so childish and they told him to pick another dream, a reasonable one this time. Too bad he didn't listen to any of them. And you know what? He's glad he didn't, because guess what? He made it. 

 

 

Foreword

This is a rewrite of a previous one shot I wrote. I was looking through my older stories and realized how terrible they were. I've decided to rewrite most if not all of them, and is was just the first one I decided to do. Previously it was called 'I Made It' and it has the same premise as this, only it was written poorly. It's still up on the site because I feel that putting it out there so I can compare my writing will only make me a better writer. So if you all wanted to see how terrible of a writer I was a year ago, feel free to go look for it. 

 

I've tried to make this as close to L.Joe's real background as possible, but of course there are things that are made up or changed. I've changed details or added them in to make the story flow better, so please understand. 

 

Anyway, hopefully you all feel the same as I do that I have vastly improved my talent for writing, and will give this story as much love as the original one. Thank you. 

 

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lostbluebunny #1
Chapter 1: oh my god!!!
this is freaking cool!
i never had a chance to read the previous version one
but after all, your story line truly inspiring
and its beautifully written especially the moment he failed and its the turning point of his life.
contradictori #2
Chapter 1: OH AND I FORGOT TO ADD: The story is truly inspiring, for me at least!
contradictori #3
Chapter 1: Dude I can only write a lot of fancy schmancy stuff that's too long-winded and kinda pointless lol. Not to mention hard to read. Whereas yours has a nice flow to it, and though you might think that the simple, straightforward writing style you have is bad, I think it's enviable, seriously! I love the last part especially, where you incorporated him failing -- did he really? o.o -- which makes everything so beautifully realistic. And the phone call at the very end was a fantastic touch, particularly when compared to your previous version. I can just imagine the scene ; u ;

You might want to proofread for minor mistakes, or perhaps to vary some adjectives/verbs, but otherwise, you really did make a HUGE improvement and you should write more yeah? B)
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