Sugar Pie Honey Bunch

Description

because Kibum is too cute and Minho can't help himself

Foreword

As usual, description says it all. and what you are about to read is a long author's note. ^^;;

Written on request by LocketyLover_Bunny who originally wanted me to write based on this and further inspired me by saying, and I quote, "How about Key just being his adorable self not knowing the effects he has on hoho, until Minho himself lets him know seeing as he can't keep away from his cuteness any longer?" and that just got my rusty brain working.

Dear LocketyLover_Bunny, I am terribly sorry for making you wait this long. It amazes me that you trust me enough to request a story and I am ever so thankful for the love and support you've given me! I can't promise that the story will fit your request because it got out of hand, and halfway through I didn't know what I was writing anymore but I left it as it is because I never liked looking back. It's actually rather plotless but I tried my best to fit the little moments you saw of minkey in that radio show in the story so here it is! And i'm truly hoping that even though it isn't what you wanted, you will still enjoy the fluff? Please feel free to let me know your honest thoughts on this okay! Whether good or bad, I would really love to know how you think of it. (:

Alright! To end this grandmother's story of mine, I would just like to thank everyone who found their way here, for giving this story a chance and i do hope that it isn't too bad a read! Feel free to share your thoughts with me as well! ^^ Enjoy the week ahead, lovely readers! <3

ps: title is as such (and may be irrelevant to the fic) because the song was playing in my head while writing this fic. lmao.

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GazeGirl64
#1
Chapter 1: Omgasdfghjksa3fvhffgbfhjgt
Man, I don't even, like, what the ? I was all retardedly squirming around cause it was so cute and funny and just unf.... I don't know man, but it was awesome
Strongspecialteuk #2
Chapter 1: Nearly died of cliff overload!! Lovely fic~
yukulicious
#3
Chapter 1: Omg. This was cute and hilarous and soo charming! I loved it! :3
atkluna #4
Chapter 1: You know I'm one of your BIGGEST fans ok. I'm so in love with your plots because ugh they are cute but entertaining and just so fun to read.

I'm going to give you a bit of constructive criticism here because you have great writing skills but there are a few mistakes you've been repeating in your recent work. First of all, you tend to use run-on sentences. Some examples are the first sentences of the second and fourth paragraph; they are extremely long when they can be broken up into smaller sentences. Especially the sentence in the fourth paragraph; that sentence is five lines long and that can be very tiring for a reader because the pause used for a comma is different from the pause used when there's a period.

You have great descriptions. It's really easy to relate with the characters even if the reader has never been through the been through an experience similar to the characters. However, you tend to put in unnecessary explanations. The first paragraph is actually extremely unnecessary because it gives away what this oneshot is about. If the reader already knows what's going to happen, then... what's the point of reading it?

I'm sorry if this comment is a bit harsh but you know I'll forever be a fangirl for your Minkey stories ^_^
deliriouscullen
#5
Chapter 1: Your infamous 'implied ' is back, love! Its about time too. I was actually starting to miss it xD Hehe. You succeeded in making me groan. >< Me wants more.. Gah! I'm back to point zero, to when I started to read your fic for the first time; enjoying it all the way and when I reach the ending I'm like 'Nooooooooo~'

P.S: ILYSM!! <#
ShawolVIP #6
Chapter 1: 'Or maybe... Aegyo while calling Minho "Oppa~" in bed would do the trick. '
ANJDNWJSOSBSHQQOWBBDIDBEHIFIFKRDHJSBPSSSSSSHHHHHHHHHHBOOOOOOMMMM THE IMAGES so haht. You, my dear, are awesome.
nxmjoon_jr
#7
Chapter 1: /dieeeeeeeeeeeeee 163648463883940584+726377374774747488485757656+73874647746548 times/
shunpeis
#8
You. Author. Stop with your fluff.
It's too perfect. ; U ;