I'M SORRY......PLEASE FORGIVE ME...

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This is my first time write story..and can said that this is my first fanfiction ....

Sorry if it not good....please comment to give you opinon.. and English is not my first language..some mistake in spelling hope for forgiveness 

 

Foreword

Today is your birthday....you wonder what will your boyfriend will give you as a pressant...last year before you both be a couple he gave you a teddy bear.The teddy bear's shirt written "I love u, please be my girlfriend...". From that day both of you became a couple.....What happen when in the day that is your birthday~you saw your boyfriend with another girl at garden smilling hapilly.... 

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ctnajihah #1
Chapter 3: i like ur story.. but i dont........ending
Minho-- #2
Chapter 3: Well, I don't mean to be mean or anything but more details would be good.
And also you should try to work more on the reactions of the characters. I mean, No girls would let a boy who broke her heart come in her house as if nothing happened just after she saw him cheating on her.
And there's also a few things that are really incoherent like :
1- Myungsoo saw her at the park and knows that she saw him with Stephany but still say that he's with his hyung.
2- She saw Myungsoo 'cheating' on her. SHE ACTUALLY SAW IT and Myungsoo only apologized for forgetting her birthday when the main thing in the story is obviously that he 'cheated' on her.

There's a few other things but I4ll stop here. I'm really sorry if I offended you with what I said *bows* Keep working and I'm sure you'll do a great job ^^b
Peeeachy #3
Chapter 1: WOAH!!
PLEASE UPDATE SOOON~~~:))
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