The Devil Made Me Do It

Description

Kai is a detective trapped in a city with more crime then order.

His cases pile up but none as gruesome as the latest homicides.

They all had the water out of them, while they where alive.

The S.H.I. a special unit of the police department, with a little advantage.

With a team full of the best detectives and jokers in town, Kai will have to depend on them more then he thinks, because sometimes a thing so black its beyond help shines the brightest to a certian detective.

Now Kai is chasing down a man who he is pulled to, a man that might be the very devil himself.

Kai can only hope to clear this case and his conscience, but he has to question himself about his feelings, weither they are right.

Light has nothing to do with it but rather the deepest pits of Hell, but how can someone tell the diference when both are just as bright?

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sarahleto
#1
Good story!!
XDoubleComboX #2
Chapter 2: Wow 0.0
I hope you decide to continue this story because it seems sooo awesome!!! >.<
Plz update? *puppy dog eyes* O.O
luhandsome123
#3
......love you.
luhandsome123
#4
MAX.
UPDATE.
YOUR.
FREAKING.
STORY.
RIGHT.
ING.
NOW.
xomatic
#5
Chapter 2: I love your idea and express some great original concepts really well here. The pacing and character dynamics, as well as the clear sense of mood, are really well handled, and you seem to have placed a fairly original bent on the usual cop and criminal theme. From what I've read so far you also don't overwrite and keep things just vague enough to engage the reader with all the questions they need to ask about what will happen next. You did have a few minor syntax and grammar errors; while they're not a huge problem, picky readers will often notice these things. So take your time, reread and edit because it will improve the flow of your story and make the way you express some things clearer. Good luck, I look forward to seeing where you'll take us in the future :)
lunaluna #6
Chapter 1: Wow! This is amazing! Can't wait for the next one!<3