PastelClover - My Boyfriend Is A Player
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My Boyfriend Is A Player - PastelClover
Reviewer: cherrylisa
Title: 4/5
The title is ok and already tells
Characters : 3/5
You put a charachter description in the foreword. That is perfectly fine except for the fact that you gave away a lot about some of the characters. It is better to let the reader discover more about each character as the story progresses.
You put a charachter description in the foreword. That is perfectly fine except for the fact that you gave away a lot about some of the characters. It is better to let the reader discover more about each character as the story progresses.
Foreword and Description : 3/5
The description does not give that much information, but it is enough.
The description does not give that much information, but it is enough.
Originality: 8/10
The story is very funny, but I have no idea where it is leading to, I tried my best to read until the last chapter you have poster until. The originality of the story is okay, because this sort of storyline is easy to find. Finish the story with a few happenings that makes readers surprised then it would be really original.
Grammar: 12/15
The plot seems interesting, but the verb tenses are not correct. As you grow as an author and in English, I am sure that you will be able to fix this problem.
Writing style: 20/20
I do enjoy your writing style. I cannot really criticize anything about it.
Flow: 9/10
Flow was nice although in the second chapter I did become confused on some of the scene changes but I have read it several times enough to be able to make sense of it.
Overall enjoyment: 19/20
Bonus: 4/5
Total: 82/100
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