Chapter 5: I have come to review~! Alright. So I'm going to offer you constructive (I hope) criticism first so I can end this on a happy note. The pacing at times are still a bit too fast and rushed. The introduction of characters sometimes overwhelm me. The choice of words. For example, in Chapter 2, 'only dates guys that matter' keeps repeating. It would look nicer to form it in different sentences rather than the same one over and over again. I trust your vocabulary will be able to get you by. But I didn't spot anything like that again so let this one pass.

Your grammar and spelling are both so much more than just 'acceptable'. Maybe there are a few mistakes here and there but nothing too bad, only need a bit more polishing and practice. Most readers would probably miss then. Also remember to use proper punctuation. Some of the sentences have periods at the end and others don't.

I'm saying this because you still have room to grow. If your writing is horrible (psshh. As if) I probably wouldn't have even thought about reviewing. I would cringe and go back. But I didn't. You have skills so don't doubt it. Heck, I don't know why I'm even making this review - you write better than me!

I assume you won't be offended by this. I'm looking forward for your improvements, alright? Fighting~!

Please continue to write~ Don't delete it~<br />
Your writing skills are great~<br />
So please don't delete this fanfic! Unnie~

Aoi here!