Hey! xforevax here :D We split the reviews up, so the reason why this review comes first is because I finished before SHINeegirl910 :D

Title: I found Lee Junho in a Box

Link to story: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/30572/i-found-lee-junho-in-a-box-2pm-comedy-crackfic-junho-romance-sunye

Author: mmysterianna

Brief description of story: What happens if an idol is found in a box? Especially on from the male idol group of 2PM with a mother like Park Jaebeom? Hilarity ensues and the events are documented in this story.

Genre: Romance, Comedy

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General Comments: OKAY! I’m spazzing out again! Second time already because once again, this story is really good! It was funny! I pretty much laughed throughout the whole thing. It really brought up my mood, so if anybody is feeling down, head over to this fic! So, I put the link at the very top, SO LOOK IT UP!

Title: 10/10

This title sums up your story pretty well. It was a title that could draw people in and overall I really liked it.

Description/Foreword: 18/20

I can’t really say much about your description or foreword. I liked how in your foreword you had a prologue so your readers got an understanding of how she found him in the box. Your description is simple but I think you need to put just a little bit more about the plot line in it rather than what inspired you to write it.

Originality/Plot: 30/30

Very original and easy to follow plot. I quite enjoyed your fanfic! Good work :D

Grammar/Punctuation/Writing Style: 29/30

From all the stories I have reviewed so far you have by far the best grammar and punctuation. The only thing I have a problem with is your point of views. I’m really stumped. I don’t know whose point of view you are using. It’s not Jooyeon, because some scenes she doesn’t appear. It isn’t Junho because he isn’t in some scenes either. So what I’m guessing is, it’s the narrator’s POV. However, at some parts it is clearly not in the narrators POV, so I’m kind of stumped. Just make sure you get your point of view right and if you are changing POV state so.

Character/Detail: 10/10

I quite liked your characterisation and I think you developed it well. You also have quite a lot of detail. Good job!

Total: 97/100

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