Since you want to improve you writing skills I'll read it and say honest words about it, Okay? Here I go.<br />
Uhmm What do you mean by "mates"; Friends maybe classmates? "Come" should be "Came"<br />
",they think the school is the worst thing ever" should be<br />
",they thought the school was the worst thing ever"<br />
There is a bit more mistakes here as well but it seems troublesome to write them down on the comments. You said you're not good at English right? English isn't your first language?
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