Story Title: Summer Camp 2013

Author: jdh0928

Summary [As given by the author]: Kim Heeyoung thought that Summer Camp 2013 would be the worst week in her life. But it turned out to be the best one instead.

Plot: 6/10

The main character, OC Kim Heeyoung, has been chosen to attend a special summer camp to train people to become better at sports, and she's been chosen to become a cheerleading 'trainee.' But she's one of the worst cheerleaders ever.

This makes very little sense to me. You'd think that if it's such an elite camp, the people in charge of selecting who gets to go would be much more careful with this kind of stuff. She's even so bad that she says in the story, "I was the least from the least. I was the worst from the worst" (Ch 1). If she's really this awful, and it's supposed to be super hard to get into this camp, I highly believe that whoever's selecting the people would have counted her out the moment they saw her.

The rest of the story is littered with cliches straight out of a bad chick flick, like all the girls ganging up on the main character, and a miraculous recovery at the end that propels the main character into stardom.

Character Development: 6/10

The character development in this fic is rather weak. The OC is mostly two-dimensional, and Daehyun doesn't really seem to do much else but look hot and fawn over Heeyoung.

Spelling+Grammar: 5/10

The spelling for this is mostly fine, however the grammar is, to be blunt, pretty bad. The first sentence is already indicative of this:

"Summer Camp on 2013 was the day that I like the most."

Firstly, 2013 is not a day, but a year, so that doesn't make sense. Because you used the word 'was,' that makes the sentence past tense, however you later use 'like,' which is present tense.

The story is littered with even more errors, however they seem to lessen slightly nearer to the end of the story.

Layout: 9.5/10

Personally, I prefer fics without backgrounds, and this one was a little distracting due to the title popping up every few inches. However, this is easily remedied by the 'enable reader mode' button. The font was a good easy-to-read size in my opinion, however it is larger than average size.

Overall Opinion: 6/10

Although I do enjoy reading OC fics on occasion, this was not one of my particular favorites. The plot was very difficult to believe, the characters simply weren't very engaging, and the many grammatical mistakes made this a difficult read. It's a cute story, but that alone can't save it from the many other errors in this fic. If you like cute and fluffy stories, you may enjoy this, however, I would not personally recommend it.

Final Grade: 65%—D

If you want to check out this story, you can find it here.