Mercy 자비 || pandamwah [REVIEW]
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Story: Mercy 자비
Title [5]
4/5
Your title is very cool and gives out nothing about the story. The korean words beside however, give it the ability to attract people as after all, those seeking k-pop stories are all interested in korean.
Fanfic Graphic [5]
3/5
Your poster in the forword fits the story well but it is a bit too plain. Maybe you can add a bit more characters? The words below the title can't be seen. Is it suppossed to be like that? Your poster from chapter two onwards were rather better because it fits the title of the story well.
Synopsis of fanfic [10]
8/10
Your synopis is very interesting and will make people curious enough to read on. However, what is the pairings for? Is it suppossed to be ? Good friends? Buddies? You have to state clearly or readers will get confused. I think it was good that you put in the various stagenames of EXO (Yixing- Lay, Yifan-Kris, Junmyeon- Suho, etc) so that readers will not be confused by the names.
Plot [30]
25/30
Your plot is something I have never seen before so it made a change from other stories in AFF. It actually felt like I was really reading a book, which is a good thing. However your story is a bit short for a normal story.
Originality [10]
9/10
You have a wonderful story. It is unique and i've never seen anyone with such an awesome plot before. There is only one word to describe your story. U-N-I-Q-U-E.
Grammar & Spelling [10]
8/10
Your grammar and spelling is okay generally and there are a few problems but nothing serious. One of the examples are:
{“Blow it!” Jongdae excalimed , clasping his hands together.}
The correct spelling is exclaimed. Maybe you typed too quickly and didn't see.
{“Blow it!” Jongdae excalimed , clasping his hands together.}
The correct spelling is exclaimed. Maybe you typed too quickly and didn't see.
Characterization [10]
4/10
The reason why i'm failing your characterisation is because the story is quite confusing and there are a lot of times when I don't understand your story. I don't understand who is supposed to be the bad guy, who is supposed to be the good guy.
An example:
{Minseok playfully shoved Jongdae aside and buried his hand on Jongdae’s face, refusing to take it off even when Jongdae tried to pry it off his face. “You have to make a wish first, babo,” Minseok shouted.}
I particularly didn't understand this paragraph. Maybe you typed wrongly?
An example:
{Minseok playfully shoved Jongdae aside and buried his hand on Jongdae’s face, refusing to take it off even when Jongdae tried to pry it off his face. “You have to make a wish first, babo,” Minseok shouted.}
I particularly didn't understand this paragraph. Maybe you typed wrongly?
Pacing and flow of events [10]
8/10
Your pacing and flow is more or less alright. You've stretched the story well. However, your chapters could have been longer.
Overall enjoyment [10]
8/10
Your story is truthfully one of the best i've ever seen. I've certainly enjoyed reading it. You describe the story so well that I get the feeling that i'm standing there rather than me just reading the story. My eyes just automatically read the next word and digest it all in. Great job!
Total: 78/100
Reviewer: Caitllynlyn
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