Everyday is a Sunday Evening || Maudmoonshine [REVIEW]
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Story: Everyday is a Sunday Evening
Title [5]
4/5
The title, though not very eye-catching, has the "ability" to make readers think it is boring at first, yet take a further step down and think : But what is it about a Sunday Evening that everyday is a Sunday Evening? Thus, it gradually makes people click on your story and read it.
Fanfic Graphic [5]
3/5
There isn't any graphic for your Fanfiction, therefore I evaluated the photo you used at the description instead. It has an angst and sad feeling to it, thus already giving the readers a feeling that it would be a sad story. However I feel that it would be better if you were to have a poster for your two-shot ^^
Synopsis of fanfic [10]
8/10
The synopsis is short, sweet, simple and clear-cut for a two-shot. A sentence that sums it all up : Who, When & What. It gives readers an idea of the big picture and allows them to decide if they want to continue reading. It attracts readers by telling them what is happening all in all. To be honest, I don't like synopsis which are short, but this has changed my mind. :)
Plot [30]
28/30
I can tell you I really felt like I could cry anytime: Due to the pain Henry was experiencing, the strong love that Sunri had for him (but of course it wasn't really the love every normal other fanfiction contains... And lastly, the pain both parties were experiencing. (Although they were experiencing different kinds of pains.) My heart literally stopped beating when Eunhyuk and Henry were physically abused.
Originality [10]
8/10
Your story is extremely unique--- I have never read stories like that before. [Even if I have read a few angst stories, none is as emotionally draining as this...]
Grammar & Spelling [10]
9/10
What?! You say English isn't your first language?! UNBELIEVABLE! Because you grammar and spelling is simply P.E.R.F.E.C.T. That's all I can say. /speechless due to over-amazement/
Well, except for a small little error which got me confused for a little while... [I would advise you to still proofread you story no matter how awesome your spelling and grammar is to play safe ^^]
And the mistake is : "You guys took her from me," a small gleam from her eyes were present.
It should be "him" instead of "her" because you're referring to Henry. Perhaps you would like to change it ^^
Characterization [10]
9/10
I can differentiate the characters really well--- Whenever you use "he", I would know whether it is referring to Henry or Eunhyuk, thanks to your fantastic sentence structures ^^ However, refer to the mistake that I pointed out. That mistake will confuse readers and make them refer back after reading the next few sentences to determine who it is that Sunri was talking about. Therefore for characterization, that mistake has caused you to lose 1 mark due to it confusing readers of which character it is referring to.
Pacing and flow of events [10]
9/10
The pacing was just right. When you wrote about the scene at the hospital to the scene where it was Sunri with Eunhyuk or Henry only, it flowed very smoothly and does not leave readers to think about what happened in between scenarios.
Overall enjoyment [10]
10/10
I would be lying if I said I did enjoy it. The only thing was that I regret reading it while eating, because of the physical abuses Henry and Eunhyuk experienced--- Because you wrote it so well and detailed that the whole scene could play out in my head. Hehe xD (Okay why am I being so informal here... ;/ ) I love the story! And of course, Eunhyuk and Henry~ Hehe :D As for Sunri, it was a bad ending for her, but I'm glad it happened, or else Eunhyuk would die :( That's all! Continue writing awesome, angsty fanfics! I'll definitely check it out! ^^
Total: 88/100
Reviewer: Inspirit7_love
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