Aish! That Jung Daehyun! || kpoplistener [REVIEW]
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Story: Aish! That Jung Daehyun!
Title [5]
4/5
The title is appealing and interesting. It makes people want to click on thestory to find out more. However, it gives off an informal vibe.
Fanfic Graphic [5]
4/5
The graphic matches the story. I think it is good that you did not overcrowd your poster by adding unnecessary minor characters. However, you may want to add a tagline or quote in the poster to give readers a clue about the story.
Synopsis of fanfic [10]
4/10
Your description is too generalised. I can't really get anything from reading that one paragraph. Try to elaborate more, maybe what or who gave her the opportunity to stay with B.A.P?
Plot [30]
20/30
Your plot is interesting. However, it is also a bit unrealistic. NamJoo's mother would let her go like that, no questions asked? Even though she will be living with her cousins, she will still be living with 6 unknown boys. Her mom have only met some of them once and for some of them, not at all.
Originality [10]
3/10
Your story is very common and can be found in a lot of stories. There is nothing to differ yours from other writers. It is only till the back then your plot becomes a bit more unique . However, if readers get bored, they would just stop reading before getting to the interesting parts. They would feel that they could find this genre of story elsewhere.
Grammar & Spelling [10]
7/10
Your spelling is perfect. I can hardly find any spelling errors in the chapters I read. As for your grammar, there are quite a few errors throughout your story. Maybe you should proofread it first before posting the chapter up.
E.G.
From Chapter 6
“Oppa, you want some of your ice tea? It might calm you down.” Minhwa suggested as she placed at glass of ice tea in front of Daehyun.
“Oppa,do you want some of your iced tea? It might calm you down.” Minhwa suggested as she placed a glass of iced tea in front of Daehyun.
E.G.
Yep, Minhwa glued the glass on the table. Daehyun tried everything to lift up the glass as me and Minhwa burst out laughing.
Yep, Minhwa had glued the glass onto the table. Daehyun tried everything he could to lift up the glass as Minhwa and I burst out laughing.
Characterization [10]
3/10
Up until chapter 10, I still can't understand even the major characters, NamJoo and Daehyun, well. Even though it isn't the main point of the story, readers still need to know more about NamJoo and Daehyun's life before meeting each other.
Pacing and flow of events [10]
5/10
Your story is very draggy. I don't see an end and it could've been shorter.
Overall enjoyment [10]
6/10
There were some chapters which I couldn't really understand. The story was very interesting in the beginning. However, after reading for a while, I started to get bored. You should add something to spice up the story, although it got better at the back, readers might feel bored and decide not to look at further chapters.
Total: 56/100
Reviewer: Caitlynlyn
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