Hurricane Girl

Description

He is a self-assured playboy at first sight.

She is a cold unfriendly girl at first sight.

She wanted to stay unnoticed but he was so popular that nobody could miss him where he appears. 

Every girl would die to be his girlfriend but she was ignoring him.

So what happens when he decide that she will not ignore him anymore?

 

Here I am again. After having good responses on my One-shot (check i out if you didn't), I decided to start a new story. A Kris-biased this time. I found myself kind of obsessed by this guy these days so I started writing a fiction. I will not stop my other chaptered story (the Siwon-Biased one, I hope you will chek it out as well), I will update the two stories as I can. And i'm going to take my vacation soon, so I will have a lot of free time. What is the story about? You will have to read the foreword to decide if you will follow it or not.

Comments, suggestions and all will be appreciated. It's always a pleasure to have ones. 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Han Sora

-Cold at first sight, arrogant, lonely

-Great dancer

-Don't believe in men and hate liars because of her father

-Poor, have to work to live

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Kris

-Self-confident playboy and arrogant as well

-From a rich family

-Popular and cool at school

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Kim Myungsoo

-New student at school (will come at chapter 5) and you'll have to read to find his personality and role in the story

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Yoon SeoAh (You'll have to read to find her personnality and role too but don't get tricked by her smile... Demon can smile too -hint hint-)

Foreword

 

Hurricane Girl, that’s how they all called her. She would leave no one indifferent. Either you loved her or hated her. That girl was self-sufficient. Courageous, independent, strong, she did not need anyone to survive. Anyway she had no choice but to fight to survive. She unfortunately had an unfaithful father who left when she was just 3, a mother who had never recovered from this shock, living of medicines and alcohols. Needless to say that she didn’t have a dreamy life. She hadn’t been to school long. After her high school graduation she had been to college just a year and she has stopped to start working, sparing her mother from having to pay for her to continue attending college. Even when saying she was fine, deep inside her, she envied them. She envied all those who were able to study, to have an easy and decent life. She envied them just as she hated them for being so arrogant, especially in this school.

This dance school, she was coming there every day to clean. Therefore she was used to meet all these students, doing what she was secretly dreaming to do. Some of them were kind to her but others, by their high status were having fun by scorning her. Messing up the practice room for her to clean it after them. Even if deep inside her she wanted to rebel, she just couldn’t. She could not afford to lose that job, not when she was sure to have found her goal and was fighting for it. Even if she was obliged to support these stupid and arrogant rich kids without respect.

Like every time she had finished with work, she was waiting at the rooftop for all the students to leave. Always with her old earphones on ears, those that she had bought with her first salary. Letting herself getting carried by the music. It was the only thing that could calm her, plunging her in a distant world, for a few minutes. Once the last student left, she came back inside the school, taking her shoes off, she didn’t want to have to clean it again. She came to a room, the practice room which she had the key. The owner had given the key to her because he knew how much she loved dance and she had begged him so hardly that he accepted to give the key to her but she was just allowed to use the room when nobody was around.

She took off her sweat shirt and started stretching. She thought about all the dancers here who had hurt a muscle just because they didn’t stretch. She laughed of their stupidity. It was so basic to stretch before practicing, she thought that she could be such a better dancer than all that girls if she had the chance to take classes as them. Then she decided to stop thinking about it. It was just a way of hurting herself.

Putting her USB Key on the hi-fi, when the music started playing, she just started moving automatically in front of the mirror. As usual, she improvised, leaving a place to all that she was feeling at the moment. She was carried by the music and her steps were agile like those of a swan. Even if it was just a little moment given by that director, she was enjoying it like it was the best present that should be never given to her. Song after song, she could not even feel the tiredness. But she automatically stopped dancing when a familiar face appeared through the mirror.

“I knew that I would meet you again.” He said, leaving her silent once again.

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KimHeeChullie #1
That moment when your name is actually Han Sora .. HAHA <3
Rini6189
#2
Kris and Sora seem to have patched things up nicely between them. Since he was being sincere, she couldn't help but to accept him and drop her cold exterior. He's created a chance to make it up to her by inviting her to go on an outing with him. It sounds like it could be a date depending on the atmosphere. Now they can work towards building a better relationship with each other.

Seoah doesn't seem like such a bad person. She is nice to not want to cause trouble for others and looking to get along with Kris and develop a good brother-sister relationship with him. Her fear of other people might have something to do with her sense of mistrust because of how she grew up. Nobody must've truly accepted her, so she doesn't feel like she belongs or loved. The students in the dance academy warmed up to her just because of her social status. If she's in the same social class as Sora, they would've treated her differently. That must make her feel lonely and depressed inside. Being surrounded by people like that must make it difficult for her to make friends. It wouldn't be hard for her to approach Sora since she's different from the rest of the students in the academy. If they ever get the chance to meet and bond, they could develop a good friendship between them. Those guys who just went up to Seoah are bad news. They do sound _______ed, especially when their leader spoke in that tone of voice to suggest something. Because of her evident surprise at seeing the person, it might be Kris coming to her rescue. She didn't think that he'd care about her to save her from danger since he only showed contempt towards her. If it's not him, it could be Myungsoo or another guy character who hasn't been introduced into the story yet. It's likely that she had met Myungsoo or this other guy before to be surprised to see him show up.
Rini6189
#3
Ch. 10 mistakes (Part 3):

Kris was the only family with his father that was left to her.
* The verb that's used twice should be "is" instead of "was."

She felt shadows covering the sunlight which cut her from her thoughts she was so concentrated in to not notice that a band of three guys had approached her.
Correction: She saw shadows blocking the sunlight, which cut her off from her thoughts. She was so focused on her thoughts to not notice that a group of three guys had been approaching her.

one of them said squatting in from of her.
Correction: One of them said, squatting down in front of her.

he was grinning and the other guys behind him was doing the same their hands in their pockets.
Correction: He was grinning and the other guys behind him were doing the same their hands in their pockets.

Come with me I’ll show you around.”
* The conjunction "and" should be added after "me."

“Leave me alone please.”
* Comma after "alone"

It’s going to be fun come on.”
Correction: It’s going to be fun. Come on.”

He was dragging her away from her bag and she tried to free herself from his embrace but she wasn’t strong enough.
Correction: He was dragging her away from her bag and she tried to free herself from his grasp, but she wasn’t strong enough.

Usually since primary school, she had always been the girl scared of everybody; the girl who cried when someone looked at her too intensely.
Correction: Since primary school, she has always been the girl who is scared of everybody, the girl who cries when someone looks at her too intensely.

She had started to yell so that someone would hear but they were a little far from school.
Correction: She had started to yell so that someone could hear, but they were a little far from school.

“Keep calm, I promise you you’ll enjoy the walk.”
Correction: “Keep calm. I promise you that you’ll enjoy the walk.”
Rini6189
#4
Ch. 10 mistakes (Part 2):

I will tell you everything you need to know someday but just give me time.
* Comma before "but"

“Down quickly before I put you on detention.”
Correction: “Come down quickly before I put you in detention.”

Kris said returning her her bag with his usual teasing smile.
* Comma after "said"

He didn’t wait for her answer for preventing her from saying no and turned his back to her and started to leave.
Correction: He didn’t wait for her answer to prevent her from saying "no" and turned his back on her and started to leave.

Seo Ah first day at her new school was quite awkward.
Correction: Seo Ah's

So at lunch time she went away from school to be alone.
Correction: So, at lunch time, she went away from the school's campus to be alone.

She opened it in front of her so that people would avoid bothering her but she wasn’t reading.
* Comma before "but"

When I heard that I had a brother I took it as an opportunity to start from a scratch.
Correction: When I heard that I have a brother, I took it as an opportunity to start from scratch.

I’m not the judgmental style but I was in a school for rich kids.
Correction: I’m not the judgmental type, but I was in a school for rich kids.

I like to stay at home Saturday night to watch a movie in my bedroom or read a book under my blanket.
Correction: at home on Saturday nights

When she came here, she had believed that she could have a brother-sister relationship with Kris but she couldn’t blame him for being rude to her.
* Comma before "but"

She could understand how much he felt betrayed by his father after discovering that he had a hidden child all this time.
Correction: has

She hated him as well for not telling her the truth at first but it didn’t last long.
* Comma after "first"

She had always been a solitary children and she lost her mother a few months ago.
Correction: child
* Children is plural.
Rini6189
#5
Ch. 10 mistakes (Part 1):

She looked up to see that it was no other than Kris standing there with his hands in his pockets.
Correction: none other than

“I didn’t have choice. I was hungry and when you’re hungry everything is good.”
Correction: “I didn’t have a choice. I was hungry, and when you’re hungry, everything is good.”

He shrugged his hands on his pockets.
Correction: He shrugged and put his hands in his pockets.

“He is going to do like nothing happened on Friday night?”
* The verb should be "act" instead of "do."

“Yeah you should go.”
* Comma after "yeah"

In fact I hoped that I would be able to keep this place private again. But I think that I will have to find another place to spend my lunch time now.
Correction: In fact, I hoped that I would be able to keep this place private again, but I think that I will have to find another place to spend my lunch time now.

She was starting to close her true self again and it was the last thing he wanted.
* It should be "hide" instead of "close."

she stopped packing for a few seconds then acted like she didn’t hear and continued.
Correction: She stopped packing for a few seconds and then acted like she didn’t hear and continued.

“You owe me nothing Kris. What is so a big deal about Friday?”
Correction: “You owe me nothing, Kris. What is such a big deal about Friday?”

Even if I was drunk it is unforgivable.
Correction: Even though I was drunk, it is unforgivable.

She turned her gaze away with her arms crossed on her chest.
* The preposition should be "over" instead of "on."

Even if she could, she had no envy to escape.
* The noun should be "will" instead of "envy."

At that right moment she wanted to die in his eyes depth.
Correction: At that right moment, she wanted to die in his eyes' depths.

I already told you, you owe me anything.
* The word "don't" is missing before "owe."

“It’s not that I don’t want to tell you but I can’t.”
* Comma before "but"
JinChannie
#6
I bet it's myungsoo!
Omo Kris and sora!
wonpokemon
#7
oh snapples, who could it be?
Kris, her half-brother to save her? :O
or a new male entering and becoming her hero?
i'm curious~
but it seems that Sora and Kris seemed to have patch up... kind of nicely~
Aurelian #8
UPDATE PLEASE
paper_planes #9
Chapter3 WHat does Kris want from her OMG
Niel_girl
#10
Kris is the only one who can see how much she is fragile under her cold mask!