Vulnerable - edlyns

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Story Title: Vulnerable

Author: edlyns

Story Link: Vulnerable

Title (2/5):

Wouldn't catch my attention if I were to see it...

Appearance (3/5):

I love both your poster and background! But the problem is that your background really doesn't match your poster and it is too bright which is hurting to my eyes.I would suggest you to change the font or color too to make it more attractive for the foreword and description.

Foreword / Description (6/10):

I like the description and the foreword but I found it quite strange for you to put the character's profile in the description. You should provide pictures for the characters too to let readers know how they look like, especially for the OC.

Plot / Originality (20/25):

I have read a few fics about a girl who doesn't open her heart to guys until 'he' arrives, but

Grammar / Spelling (30/30):

I don't see any grammar or spelling mistakes! Good job :3

Flow (9/10):

Your flow is going a little fast but it's okay! O u O;

Enjoyment (13/15):

I enjoyed reading your story! Hwaiting!

Total (83/100):

A2

Grade:

A2

Date / Time Taken:

Dunno / Dunno

Reviewed by: turnbaek

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alize_sakura #1
Chapter 73: thank you for the review.. hum... i guess that's why i need help to expand the vocabularies...
GinaLy #2
Review

Name: GinaLy

Story Title: Kill Me, Kiss Me

Story Link:http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/353188/kill-me-kiss-me-choiseunghyun-parkbom-topbom-springtempo-topbomaliencouple

Genre: collection of one shots, angst, dark and depressing

Status / Number of Chapters: status ongoing 17 chapters so far

Rated / Non-Rated: Non-Rated

Reviewer: 8symmetrical8

Anything Else: Give me your honest thought. It's the first time I write here so...need a little input on things. Also I find that I write dark and depressing stories better.

Password: jewel

Thanks beforehand !
ketop4
#3
Chapter 72: i think there's a conflict in my poster... the boy next to dara is taeyang..
alize_sakura #4
Chapter 1: Review

Name: alize_sakura

Story Title: Sunsu : Legend of the Heart

Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/356081/sunsu-legend-of-the-heart-exo-exok-exom-kris-suho-fantasyexo

Genre: fantasy, romance, adventure

Status / Number of Chapters: Ongoing / 2 Chapters so far

Rated / Non-Rated: Non-Rated

Reviewer: IcePrincess2299

Anything Else: Just be honest with me. If it's good, say it good. If it's bad, tell me that it's bad. I'm taking critics as part of my skill development. Somehow, I know that Grammar / Spelling is my weakness. You might edit some if you want to.

Password: jewels

Thanks before~ ^^
ElleJacobs
#5
Chapter 70: Thank you for the Review!! :D
ElleJacobs
#6
Review

Name: Elle Jacobs

Story Title: Virus

Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/312782/virus-beast-drama-romance-supernatural-tragedy-doojoon-ellejacobs

Genre: Tragedy, Romance, Drama

Status / Number of Chapters: 9 Chapters so far.

Rated / Non-Rated: Not Rated

Reviewer: 8symmetrical8

Anything Else: i... i dont know. :/

Password: Jewels

Thanks!!! :D
th_silenttear
#7
Name: th_silenttear

Story Title: Letters To Heaven

Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/309380

Genre: angst, romance

Characters (with images, if you have): Sulli (f(x)), Taemin (shinee)

Story Summary: Sulli's letters to her boyfriend who had died

Requesting For: poster and background

Graphic Designer: prettyflowergirl

Anything Else: nope

Password: jewels

Thank you! ^^
paula1988
#8
Name:Paula1988

Story Title:Taehun's Dying Wishes

Story Link:http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/266268

Genre:drama, death, cancer,

Status / Number of Chapters:19

Rated / Non-Rated:Rated

Editor:bex13gr4c3

Anything Else:The Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation and the Plot is kinda bad and poor it also can be confusing and hard to read I want it to stand out more so people can understand and read the story more and thank you very much take your time :)

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IrenValencia #9
I know I just requested! But can I request again? LOL I love your graphic! <3

Name: IrenValencia

Story Title: I Love You More Than My Gucci

Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/298297

Genre: comedy

Characters (with images, if you have): as usual, you pick C:

Story Summarry: Kris likes Tao...who likes ‘Gucci’.

Requesting For: Poster and Background

Graphic Designer: IcePrincess2299

Anything Else: Thank you ^-^

Password: Jewels
phoenixfeathers
#10
Review

Name: Ath

Story Title: Yesterdays

Story Link: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/298192/yesterdays-friendship-exo-baekhyun-chanyeol-kris-krisbaek

Genre: Angst, Fluff, Friendship, Romance

Status / Number of Chapters: ongoing at 2/7 Chapters

Rated / Non-Rated: Non-Rated

Reviewer: um anyone :)

Anything Else:

Password:jewels

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