Yo Ho, Yo Ho! A Pirate's Life For Me - Kakurine039
Sparkling Jewels {Closed}Story Title: Yo Ho, Yo Ho! A Pirate's Life For Me
Author: Kakurine039
Story Link: Yo Ho, Yo Ho! A Pirate's Life For Me
Title (4/5):
It's a mouthful, but a well known phrase ^^ So, I have no problem with the length of it. However, it is not capitalized properly. It should be; “Yo Ho, Yo Ho! A Pirate's Life for Me” The 'for' is not capitalized.
It fits your story very well, though :D
Appearance (4/5):
The poster looks nice ^^ The only complaint is that the eeriness of the backdrop does not match the members of U-KISS >.> But, since you are in the process of getting another poster, I didn't dock you much on it :) The background matches very well, too.
Foreword / Description (9/10):
They are both intriguing, and provide good information and suspense, but the whole one sentence prophecy things seemed a tad over used. They were a little distracting, and to be honest I kind of just skipped over them.
Also, in the description, everything after 'Maybe being a pirate isn't all it's cracked up to be...' should be moved to the end of the foreword. It threw me off to have that breaking up your story >.>
Looking back on it though, I can see the current and potential foreshadow. Good job ^__^
Plot / Originality (25/25):
Full originality points! I'm not really into pirates all that much, but this is totally unheard of on this site! In fact, this is the very first pirate story I've ever even seen, probably anywhere, and I've been on quite a few writing sites, haha.
It's still a bit too early to tell a real plot. So... Kiseop wanted to be a pirate. Okay. He's now on a pirate ship. Alright... What's next? I assume it has something to do with the map, right? Or pos
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