Story Title : When I Fall
Author : lockeyme and krystal_24
Story Link : When I Fall

Title (3/5):
Your title is nice, though, I don't really seem to see how it reflects in your story.

Appearance (4/5):
Personally, I like your poster, but it gives out a rather dark image, which in my opinion, suits the story at some points only.
My suggestion would probably be the same background, font, what-so-ever but the girl with a shining aura and Jonghyun with a dark, shadowy aura. It's just a suggestion though, you can ignore this if you want~

Foreword / Description (7/10):
Nice. A bit of the background, a little suspense, but try to make it sound more interesting. :3

Plot / Originality (20/25):
I've read a LOT of fanfics with the same plot.
New girl arrives with different personality. Kingkas notices new girl and starts to fall for her, doing whatever they can to make her fall for them too. Its really typical. Sorry.

Grammar / Spelling (29/30):
No spelling errors there~^^ YAY!! *throws confetti*
As for grammar, there's a few short-term slangs like 'gonna' = going to and 'imma' = I'm/I'll..ignore these if you want~
You don't have to take them seriously as most authors (including me) use these slangs too ^^;;

Flow (8/10):
The flow is good, it's nice~
I got rather confused in chapter 6, when the girl stepped outside already although it is mentioned in the following sentence.
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