Before I Go

Description

Lyra is an everyday, ordinary, boring american girl. Her basic day consists of school, eating, sleeping and, of course anime. Her entire life she's been told that she's never going to go anywhere unless she focuses on the important things in life such as becoming an office worker. But who ever said that obsessing over anime and Japanese culture couldn't get you anywhere was wrong!  Because when Lyra starts having amazing dreams in which her favorite anime characters have come to life her world is turned upsidedown! It gets even wackier when her dreams clash with her boring reality and the same characters begin popping up in real life! How will Lyra cope with her fantastic new reality and find the future that she's been waiting for.

Foreword

I don't know how a foreword really works but here goes! To all those who have never read my stories before congratulations! You're in luck! You haven't read them before because this would be the first one! please give me lots of criticism! I need it! Thank you!

also this story was  born of an actual dream I had!

my friends who appear in this story have had their names changed! recognize yourself!... if you can... 0.o

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Nekluna #1
Chapter 3: Seems you can write a little descriptive if you want to.
Although it wasn't much in this chapter. Just some for Ash and Charizard and not for Brock nor Misty.
Can see that as a sign of them not being any important in this story.

If you wanted to add a bit of silliness, you could have named Ash Ketchum to Ash Ketchup instead.
Never liked his last name anyways. They sound pretty lame both of them.

Another short chapter, and takes merely a few minutes to get through with hardly any complications or depth to analyze.
You should try to add some later on if you can.
Otherwise this story will probably turn out to become one more of the many classic fic stories on the net you soon forget.
Even if it has pokemon elements in it.
Nekluna #2
Chapter 2: Expected this to happen.
The bored girl started to get very stressed at an "unexpected" change in her daily life.
Well...if she acted with excitement it would be old anyways.
Nekluna #3
Chapter 1: Pretty good first chapter.
But it is so classic to complain about having a normal life and not try to change it in any way more then some small cheap attempts such as making candy.

It is a little annoying when the default text is set kinda big and bolded in black. But i could shrink it is so it is somewhat ok.
Nekluna #4
Seem interesting.
Mainly because i have seen no anime, manga, game or fanfic that have used this kind of story without failing on the way or in the end.

You have used the Foreword in one of the several ways to use it.
Remove the part that you dont know what it is, that will give your whole intro a more serious feel.
Sireika1011 #5
<3 XD omg!! Soo epic!!! <3 XD Keep writing ok?
peachoons #6
Hello! Would you like a poster?
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