by  PeachCherryProposal of ℳ ℮ ℳ ℮ ╏reviews

title : 10/1O

comment(s) :

i found the title very relavant to the story! good work!  

description & foreword : 1O/1O

comment(s) :

i don't see why i shouldn't give you the full 10 marks. It was simple, yet eye-catching. awesome work!  

introduction : 1O/1O

comment(s) : i liked how donghae was such an annoying yet cute guy to jessica. it was sweet.  

overall storyline : 30/3O

comment(s) : the library is an interesting topic to write about, and it was pretty good, too!  

ending : 10/1O

comment(s) : it was too sweet and it was soooo cute and i was all d'awwwww.

graphics : 3/5

comment(s) : i like your poster very much! however, the background was a bit distracting.. try a plain patterned one, instead of one with faces.  

grammar : 15/15

comment(s) : your grammar was perfect, and i can't find any faults with that. great work!

originality : 10/1O

comment(s) : i thought it was a pretty original idea! good job!

total : 98/1OO - A*

reviewer's note : congratulations! your story was a joy for me to read, and i'm putting it in the 'recommended' section!

by IzumiSato of Lightning Speed Review Shop [Open for requests!]

Title : 10/10  It matches the story PERFECTLY!!!!

Appearance : 4/5  This in my opinion but the poster really matches the story too!

Foreword  : 9/10 It was really meaningful because it was dedicated to a friend =) and you were telling your readers of your updates.

Description : 10/10 In my opinion I LOVE your description because it gives a sense of wanting to read it and leaving people curious about the story. ^^

Characterization : 4/10 You describe Jessica personality really well when she's pissed, but you didn't put much description to the other characters.

Originality : 10/10 Your originality is the best! It's really rear someone thinks of stories like these (that i'd seen before), I love the part where Jessica was there the whole time. I never would've thought that she had stayed because your description of Jessica crushing Changmin was so like...she loved him! ^o^

Plot : 15/15 I love your plot! Even from the first part to the last part of the story! ^^

Spelling: 5/5 You have no mistakes!!! Makes me sad, now I can't criticize you!!! JK

Grammar: 3/5 In paragraph 6 when it said "Sica cut him off as she starts hitting him" Correct starts to started and your all good! (^^)b And in paragraph 16 "Jessica hit him hard one more time to shut him up" change one more to one last. In paragraph 17, last sentence change groan to groaning.  In paragraph 31 when it says stares change it to stared. In paragraph 37 Jessica paused walking, change it to Jessica stoped walking for a moment.

Punctuation: 3/5 In paragraph 14 where it says "Aww! S-Stop it! Ahh!!, you forgot to add another " at the end. In paragraph 18 when Jessica said "He was bothering me. He pissed me off. It's no big deal..." you should add comas like this, "He was bothering me and pissing me off, it's no big deal." On the last 7 paragraph where it said, "Tssss. Stupid." Change the period to a comma on the first period.

Flow : 15/15 The flow is really good! Everything went smoothly and at a nice pace.

TOTAL : 88/100 Wow! Higher than I expected!! JK You are an awesome writer so of course I had to give you this amazingly high score! Also you are my first reviewer to have this high of a score! ^^