faint smile.

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Description

She didn’t expect much from anyone around her,

she just want things works as they should be,

so someday when she turns back she can said,

“Ah, I’m so glad,”

while a faint smile hanging on her face.

Foreword

Hi there, I’m not good with description so I’ll just leave it here. After a few years from my first story that didn’t get finished, I came back with this story. Don’t worry this one will be have an end because I already half through it.

It’s just a simple story with not so many chapters. Maybe you already found this type of story or maybe not, I'm here because I want to tell this story that actually have it own place in my heart.

So, enjoy and leave a comment!!

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Sehuniekitten #1
Chapter 5: It's actually interesting but I wish you could write ... following the rule of writing paragraph and dialogue.

I mean, after someone talk you should move to the next paragraph. For example, you wrote like this:

"Alone?" Aera raised her one brow, knowing exactly he will most likely eat alone. "Speaking of that, want you to come? I'll treat-"

The second sentence in quotation ("speaking of that...") is Jongin's sentence but you mixed it into one paragraph, along with Aera' sentence and the explanation of her expression. It's confusing. You make your readers have to read carefully just to figure out who's talking at the moment while it should've been easy and quick to figure.

The standard of writing dialogue is:

"Alone?" Aera raised her one brow, knowing exactly he will most likely eat alone.

"Speaking of that, want you to come? I'll treat-"

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It's easy to understand who's currently talking and your readers don't need to think twice.
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