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Bloody Mess (One-Shot)

Title: 14- it makes me wonder what the story is about

Appearance: no poster ... 0

Description/Forward: no description >.< you should describe the characters but it does basically say it's about Aaron and gui gui 3

Characters: you should describe the characters more and tell who they are 5

Plot: the plot is interesting but you have too much details in it 12

Flow: the story goes with the flow but it sometimes gets confusing of what is happening 12

Grammar/Spelling: 10 I couldn't see any mistakes

Originality: 14 a guy and girl dying is quite original ^^

Did I Like It? 7 I'm sorry but I didn't really like it because i am a bit creeped out with blood T.T

Bonus: 4

Total (81/105) B- 

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eRnah_hanRe07 #1
Chapter 1: omo, i wanna cry.. this story is so sad..
nice story.. keep it up.. :)
tinygui #2
Wait they both died omg I'm sad but it's so sweet
Prince99 #3
So they both died? I dunno. >.<
classiccrime #4
it's beautiful!<br />
<3
Dropping #5
waaaaaaaaaaaaa charlene T_T<br />
THIS IS REALLY GREAT .<br />
I CRY . LOL<br />
THE ENDING IS BEAUTIFUL .<br />
Hands in hands , hearts with hearts *_*<br />
thanks charlene for wonderful storys :D !<br />
ChocolateMIT<3
LoveLoveShells #6
:'( <br />
im teary eyed.<br />
the way you write is so captivating.<br />
its beautiful.<br />
i love how they part happy, and. <br />
AGH.<br />
bittersweet. :/<br />
rappeating #7
aww that was so sad and sweet. like romeo and juliet >< thanks for making me read this~ <3
strawberrykiss1126 #8
I like it ...so sad .... Thanks it was very nice
Amaliya #9
Love it! It's so sad that they die :( But I really like the one-shot :D Keep up the good work~ ^-^
MisterPotato2 #10
Wow so much blood! You should have written it into a 3 shot though! So the paragraphs can *ahem* space out a little. HEHE.
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