Chapter 1: I enjoyed reading this, especially with it being in Byul's POV. The flow of the story is really good. Initially I thought the last three paragraphs were a little awkward in the story because it was after the whole conversation between Byul and Yongsun, but later on I realised it's Byul's retrospection which actually ties the whole story together nicely. The last paragraph truly tells us of Byul's thoughts, about how ultimately she can't bring herself away from Yongsun. Thank you for this!
Chapter 1: The way you delivered the tale was very impressive I have to say. It was descriptive enough to paint a picture, but not too much to bore the readers. The conversation wasn't forced, and the words flew naturally. I like how Byul's persona was sketched throughout the piece, it was gradual and it certainly hooked me into it. I don't know if I'm making sense but all I gotta say is: Thank you for this, author nim. :)
Chapter 1: Whaattttt. Byul's thoughts during the conversation and this situation are very similar to something I went through. It's almost like you know....
Chapter 1: I thought for a second that Yongsun was a ghost at the beginning hahahaha! But wow, that's a great narrative... and kinda a sad one especially the last part. Is this really completed?
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